Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Environment concern and Humanity is crucial for contemporary society. With the innovation of technology our lifestyle is convenience. In this easy I will discuss the merits of aerial transport reduction over the its demerits for organization and businesses
Firstly, Human-beings of modern general aware about global challenge such as global warming, ozone layer depletion, climate change etc. As this aerial mode need non-renewable resources such as fuel directly mix gases in the atmospheric layer. This increases the atmospheric gas concentration and reacts. When people prefer avoid the flying unnecessary ultimately downturn the pollution pattern
On the other hand, aerial mode is fast and expensive. These can be afford by all the people. The infrastructure need the massive manpower and land. These also degrade the habitat of the organism of particular environment. The development activities lead to the pollution. The nation design plan and polices depend on the demands of the citizen.
People are right decision for thing future generation avoiding the
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 161 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments are presented in a fragmented and incomplete manner. The essay does not clearly state a position on whether the environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages, and the discussion of the impact on businesses is largely absent. The conclusion is also incomplete, trailing off at the end. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed in full.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While some cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'On the other hand' are used, the connections between sentences are often strained or unclear. For instance, the transition between discussing global warming and the infrastructure of aerial transport is abrupt. The lack of a clear introduction and a finished conclusion further disrupts the flow of the argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would help create a more coherent structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. Phrases like 'aerial mode' and 'pollution pattern' are used in ways that do not sound natural in an academic context. There are also issues with word forms, such as 'convenience' used instead of 'convenient'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic in depth, and the repetition of basic terms hinders the sophistication of the writing. You should focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to the environment and transport to improve your lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'In this easy I will discuss' (should be 'essay'), 'Human-beings of modern general aware' (missing verb), and 'These can be afford by all' (incorrect passive voice). The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences, and those that are attempted often contain errors in syntax or punctuation. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on subject-verb agreement, correct verb forms, and the accurate use of articles and prepositions.
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