Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, the travelling is increasing continuously. People prefer different types of travelling modes such as, by road or by Airplane.

Because of additional travelling, pollution is increase rapidly. Many people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly or stop flying completely to reduce the pollution. From my perspective, this is positive step taken to save the environment from huge amount of pollution. Also i believe that this decision produce some amount of lose for individuals and business.

Specifically, due to modernization, people can travel easily from one to another place. In recent times, the uses of Airplane rise significantly. It is a time saving option and also give luxury experiences. The demand of flights increasing continuously during festivals and vacations. Many people use this technology for travelling during vacations. However, this technology also has pros and cons similar to other technologies. Airplane use massive amount of fuel to complete one journey. This advancement damage the environment affect the global system.

However, because of environmental benefits, some people avoid travelling through the Airplane. This decision is beneficial for the nature but it may damage the organization and individuals, who are connected with this service. If a small amount of people apply this, it may not affect them, but if every people decide to avoid these facility, then it have negative impact on business and it also reduce the tourism of specific place, which also affect local business and individuals.

In conclusion, if every people choose to avoid this advancement, it is beneficial for the environment but it

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by acknowledging both the environmental benefits and the potential drawbacks for businesses and individuals. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention that flying is 'time saving' and 'luxury', the discussion on the economic impact is repetitive and lacks specific examples or depth. The conclusion is incomplete, which prevents a full summary of your position. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph provides a clear, well-supported argument rather than general statements, and always complete your final paragraph to provide a sense of closure to your argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as the repetitive use of 'However' and 'Also'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, for example, 'this advancement' or 'this decision' could be more precisely linked to the preceding ideas. The progression of ideas is logical, but the abrupt ending of the essay significantly impacts the overall coherence, as the final thought remains unfinished. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring complete sentences would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'travelling', 'pollution', and 'good/bad' concepts. There are some noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'produce some amount of lose' (should be 'losses') and 'every people' (should be 'everyone'). While the meaning is generally clear, the range is limited, and there is little attempt to use less common or more sophisticated lexical items to express complex ideas about environmental or economic impacts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('pollution is increase', 'demand of flights increasing'), article usage ('the travelling', 'the Airplane'), and pluralisation ('every people'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to suggest a lack of control over more complex structures. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.

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