Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Introduction:
some people make a decision that they will not flying or they wanted to reduce his flying tour. They decided to stop the travel of flying altogether.
Due to growing environmental concerns some individuals choosing to fly less. While this trend may create some problems for people and companies. If we work on this process we face many difficulties but we will try to understand these difficulties and solve all problems if we are healthy. planes emit a lot of carbon dioxide because fuel is used in plane engine. This gas was very harmful for our health. If we do not use planes then our environment is very good. so will try to focus on our global environment and reduce the flying travel. So pollution reduces by this trend. We know that we lose our businesses and companies. Our companies have in loss. Because our products do not supply in other countries that we face loss of our businesses. we will not travel in plane as a tourist. The number of tourist in the world will less. But if we focus our businesses we will be able to reach our destination. This trend have a big disadvantage that education is very difficult by applying this process.
Conclusion:
we know that planes are very good facility for our travel. Because we travel a long distance by plane in hours. If we travel this distance by car or bus we need a time of days. But planes emit a gas carbon dioxide this gas is very dangerous for our atmosphere. First of all this is our duty to clean our environment in any case.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the environmental benefits and the disadvantages for businesses and individuals. However, the position is not clearly maintained throughout the essay. The development of ideas is limited; for instance, the mention of 'education' being difficult due to this trend is not explained or supported with relevant examples. The argument lacks depth, and the conclusion does not clearly weigh the two sides as requested by the prompt. The response is somewhat repetitive, and the ideas are presented in a fragmented manner, which prevents a fully developed argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are abrupt and often confusing. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and repetitive way, such as the frequent use of 'Because' and 'If'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument. The overall structure is disjointed, and the lack of effective linking words between sentences and paragraphs hinders the clarity of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas effectively. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'stop the travel of flying' and 'our companies have in loss'. The range of vocabulary is narrow, relying on simple terms like 'good', 'bad', and 'difficult'. To improve, the student needs to use a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to environmental issues and economics, and pay closer attention to how words are combined in natural English phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('This trend have a big disadvantage'), verb tense usage ('some individuals choosing to fly'), and sentence structure. The essay relies heavily on simple sentences, and attempts at complex structures are often faulty or incomplete. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many sentences being fragmented. The high frequency of errors in basic grammar significantly limits the clarity and professional tone of the writing.
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