Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In recent years, many people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether has become an increasingly common feature of modern life. While this development brings a number of benefits it also carriers certain drawbacks. This essay will examine both the advantages and disadvantages of fly every year before reaching a conclusion.
One major advantage of each year is many benefits but one main benefit they remain healthy . This is mainly because health is very important in human life there fore every humans should maximum one fly in every year.A clear example of this can be seen if they international travel for every year,they have great risk to their lives due to plane crash there fore travel yearly is not good in human body. In addition if they have trip each year, they have lost of business every human should spend time to business they can get profit to business.
However, there are also some drawbacks associated with fly every year. Firstly, they have many shortcoming but main disadvantage they have not take care in human bod
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. The essay is incomplete, ending abruptly in the second body paragraph. While the prompt asks for a discussion on environmental benefits versus disadvantages for individuals and businesses, the arguments provided are underdeveloped and often unclear. For instance, the claim that flying causes health risks like 'plane crashes' is not a logical environmental argument, and the point about business is vague. The position is not clearly maintained throughout due to the lack of a conclusion and the fragmented nature of the content.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction, the body paragraphs are disjointed and fail to develop a coherent argument. Cohesive devices such as 'In addition' and 'However' are used, but they do not effectively link ideas because the underlying logic is flawed. The paragraphing is insufficient, and the abrupt ending prevents any sense of progression or conclusion. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic words and phrases, such as 'many benefits', 'good', and 'bad', which are insufficient for an academic task. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'carriers' instead of 'carries' and 'shortcoming' used incorrectly. The lack of variety and the misuse of terms hinder the expression of complex ideas, keeping the lexical range at a very basic level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence construction, such as the opening sentence which is grammatically incoherent. Subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'every humans should'), incorrect word forms (e.g., 'fly' used as a noun instead of 'flying'), and missing articles are pervasive. The range of structures is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, further detracting from the clarity of the writing.
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