Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays people are choosing safety over comfort and priority. People want to travel in a safer way irrespective of cost due failures of areoplans are more in these days. In my opinoin their must be both advantages and disadvantages and their are environmental benifits since there are limitations in business field and also in individuality.

To begin with, People are willing to travel in saferway to their destination other than choosing fly and also stop flying altogether. Here they worried about breakdowns of areoplans and leads to accidental situations. But here people must think about, failures may occur due technical issues and weather conditons too. If it continues they fly-stops may shuntdown.

There are many drawbacks due to stop flying altogether. It may effect on inividuals and their businesses. Flyes are used mainly emergency purpose irrespective of money to reach destination in time to continue work on time. If flying stoped by people it may cost more and time cosuming part travelling towards location which leads to lack of time management. At starting persons may feel discomfort in using other than areoplans in emergency situation. By deciding to reduce flying all at once will create a downfall of economy of a particular country. Not only it reduces economy of country also it give a lot down fall of individuals businesses firms due to punctuality on work as follows.

By concluding, Reducing flying in some sitation better to experience other transportation in life. But it is not nessessary to stop flying all at once. If it stops it may leads to outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and their businesses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt but struggles with clarity and focus. While you mention both environmental benefits and disadvantages for businesses, the argument is often obscured by confusing language. For example, you begin by discussing 'safety' and 'accidental situations' rather than the environmental impact, which is the core of the prompt. The position is somewhat unclear, as the conclusion contradicts the earlier points. To improve, ensure that each paragraph directly supports your central argument regarding whether the environmental benefits outweigh the economic drawbacks. You need to provide more specific, logical examples rather than general statements about 'accidental situations' or 'technical issues'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Transitions are often mechanical or misused, such as 'At starting persons' or 'By concluding'. The referencing is frequently unclear; for instance, in the second paragraph, it is difficult to follow the link between 'technical issues' and the conclusion that 'fly-stops may shuntdown'. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, which makes the flow of ideas disjointed. To improve, focus on using linking words that clearly signal the relationship between sentences, such as 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'on the other hand', and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede understanding. Examples include 'areoplans' (aeroplanes), 'benifits' (benefits), 'inividuals' (individuals), and 'shuntdown' (shut down). You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'accidental situations' and 'down fall of economy', which lacks the precision required for a higher band. To improve, work on learning collocations—words that naturally go together—and focus on accurate spelling. Expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to the environment and economics would also significantly enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a limited range of grammatical structures, and the text contains frequent errors in sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and article usage. For example, 'their must be' should be 'there must be', and 'If flying stoped by people' should be 'If flying is stopped by people'. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper structure, making them difficult to parse. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors causes difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like 'their' versus 'there'.

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