Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In recent years, some individuals have decided to reduce travel by airplane or to stop flying altogether. It is frequently believed that this issue has become increasingly significant in modern society. While this trend offers several advantages. It also raise concern about reducing flying and stop as well. I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages in this essay.
To start with advantages of control from flying or stop to fly one major benefit that businessman will focus on their business instead of tiredness of extra flights This means that those people who fly a lot they always mentally tired for example, a lot of people who are not satisfied with too much travels because they are very busy in jobs whic fo not allow them to unnecessary fly. Additionally a lot of travel is not healthy for people.
On the other hands, certain disadvantages of this activity people have decided that they will stop flying completely because this leads to depression staying in one place because people need relaxation they want a break from their regular activities for instance, if somebody is living in a country for a long time he needs break. Moreover trevalling make them happy when they meet with their families. This may has some sequences for example if somebody doest mot take break and do not fly he will be disturbed by situation.
To conclusion, although there are multiple benefits of reduce flying or stop flying altogether but also have some disadvantages such as depression and tiredness. However i believed that people shoul set a limit for travelling.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but fails to focus on the core issue: the environmental benefits versus the disadvantages. The student focuses primarily on personal tiredness and the need for vacations rather than environmental impact. The position is not clearly developed, and the arguments are largely irrelevant to the specific question asked. The essay lacks a clear focus on the environmental aspect, which is the central theme of the prompt. Consequently, the ideas are under-developed and do not fully address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'To start with' and 'Moreover', they are often used incorrectly or in a mechanical way. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between ideas is disjointed. The conclusion is brief and does not effectively summarise the main points or provide a clear final thought. The paragraphing is present but does not always support the logical development of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'control from flying' and 'unnecessary fly'. The student struggles to use precise language to discuss the topic, relying on basic terms like 'happy', 'tired', and 'disturbed'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or an attempt to use academic vocabulary appropriate for an IELTS Task 2 essay. The errors in word formation occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('It also raise concern'), incorrect verb forms ('stop to fly'), and punctuation errors. Sentence structures are often simple or fragmented, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, such as 'if somebody doest mot take break and do not fly he will be disturbed by situation'. These errors are persistent and often impede the reader's understanding of the intended message.
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