Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Environmental pollution is the major concern for all the nations and multiply measures are applying to reduce it. Due to the environmental issue few people have decided to lessen their travel by air or totally stop flying. In my opinion, this development has more advantages than drawbacks.
Not Using planes for the travel is the wisest choice, if we want to save the environment. Air vehicles pollutes air as well as it causes noise pollution too, which causes multiple air borne diseases as well as hearing problem . For instance, In today's world, new born babies are born with asthma disease which is caused due to bad quality of air. Moreover, not using air mode for travelling is beneficial for people as well as businesses because the fare of airplanes are too expensive and not everyone is able to affort it. So avoiding it, can save money. Furthermore, businesses also gets benefit for not using planes for travelling. It can reduce physical meetings and shifted to online platforms. It helps in saving time as well as reduce frequent meetings. For example, MNC's ceo doesn't need to fly in every country for a meeting, they can use online modes for meetings.
On the other hand ,The disadvantages of not
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the development of ideas. While you present a clear position, the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. The arguments regarding environmental benefits are introduced but lack depth and sufficient supporting evidence. The discussion on disadvantages for individuals and businesses is barely touched upon before the text cuts off. To improve, you must ensure you complete the task by addressing all parts of the prompt and providing a full conclusion. The current length prevents a full exploration of the topic, leading to an underdeveloped response that fails to meet the basic requirements of an academic essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization, using basic cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the abrupt ending makes it impossible to evaluate the overall coherence of the piece. Paragraphing is present, but the structure is compromised by the unfinished nature of the text. The progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical, and the lack of a concluding paragraph further hinders the flow. To reach a higher band, ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, well-developed body paragraphs with distinct points, and a coherent conclusion that summarizes your main arguments.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision expected at higher levels. You rely on somewhat repetitive phrasing, such as 'not using planes' and 'not using air mode'. There are also minor errors in word choice and form, such as 'multiply measures' (should be 'multiple') and 'affort' (spelling error for 'afford'). To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to the environment and business, and focus on using collocations more accurately. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repetition and express your ideas with greater clarity and impact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Examples include 'Air vehicles pollutes air' (subject-verb agreement error), 'causes hearing problem' (missing article), and 'businesses also gets benefit' (subject-verb agreement). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors suggests a need for more careful proofreading. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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