Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the rapidly changing world, many issue have become the subject of widespread debate. some people hold different opinion according to their personal experiences or social, environmental effect. In this essay we discuss the disadvantages for individuals and businesses. In this essay, I give answer and reason for my answer and also give any relevant example from my own knowledge or experience.
In favor of my stance. One of the most important important point is that environmental benefit. If airplane stop flying or do less flying it can reduce carbon emissions. When airplane start flying it release carbon gases which can effect weather or air pollution. Second important benefit is less noise or less air pollution. If airplane stop flying or do less aviation it can reduce noise or less air pollution.
In this para we discuss about disadvantages for peoples and businesses. First we discuss about drawbacks for individuals. First downsides is long distance travel, when plane stop flying or do less aviation it can highly impact on common people or shipment companies. Second flaws is high cost for alternative travels. Now we discuss drawbacks about businesses. First disadvantages is less tourism. Less aviation can effect country economy.
In conclusion, i want to state my own point is that people did not stop aviation it can effect many
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both the environmental benefits and the disadvantages for individuals and businesses, the arguments are superficial and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. The position is stated but not consistently maintained, and the conclusion is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and ensure the essay reaches the required length to allow for a full exploration of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'First' and 'Second' to start sentences. Referencing is often unclear, and the transition between ideas is abrupt. The essay lacks a clear, cohesive structure, and the abrupt ending further disrupts the flow of information. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects logically to the overall argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas. Phrases like 'do less flying' and 'do less aviation' are imprecise and unnatural. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or an awareness of collocation. Many words are used incorrectly, such as 'effect' instead of 'affect'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to the environment and economics, and work on expanding your vocabulary to avoid repeating the same simple words throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many issue have become'), article usage, and sentence structure. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. Complex structures are rarely attempted and, when they are, they often contain errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the use of complex sentences to add variety to your writing.
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