Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Across the world lots of people are travelled by the flights. Their are some people they decided to decrease the number of times they fly every year or to stop the flying altogether. The benefits and drawbacks of this would be elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with this benefits to this for environment by this reduce the air pollution, air traffic, reduce use of the fuels it is main point of the to giving the benefits to the environment. That also a other point of the save the environment is use the other way of the transportation to reduce the pollution .
On the other side of hand is also some disadvantages occur if the people can't took the flight coast should be high and it is very difficult to handle this all by the businesses heavy loss Across the world lots of people are travelled by the flights. Their are some people they decided to decrease the number of times they fly every year or to stop the flying altogether. The benefits and drawbacks of this would be elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with this benefits to this for environment by this reduce the air pollution, air traffic, reduce use of the fuels it is main point of the to giving the benefits to the environment. That also a other point of the save the environment is use the other way of the transportation to reduce the pollution .
On the other side of hand is also some disadvantages occur if the people can't took the flight coast should be high and it is very difficult to handle this all by the businesses heavy loss
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both environmental benefits and disadvantages for businesses. However, the development of ideas is very limited. The essay repeats the same introductory paragraph twice, which significantly reduces the amount of original content. The arguments provided are superficial and lack specific examples or logical depth. For instance, the mention of 'heavy loss' for businesses is not explained or supported with any reasoning. Because the essay relies on repetition and fails to fully develop the points required to explore the topic, it does not meet the requirements for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The most significant issue is the repetition of the entire introduction and the first two paragraphs, which creates a disjointed and confusing reading experience. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the paragraphing is ineffective due to the duplicated content. The progression of ideas is not clear, and the reader struggles to follow the argument because the text essentially restarts halfway through. This indicates a failure to manage the organisation of the response effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'travelled by the flights' instead of 'travel by air' and 'coast should be high' instead of 'costs would be high'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the repetition of the same phrases throughout the text further limits the lexical variety. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology related to the environment or business, relying on simple, often inaccurate, phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that often impede communication. Examples include 'Their are some people they decided' (incorrect pronoun usage and existential 'there'), 'if the people can't took the flight' (incorrect verb tense), and 'it is main point of the to giving' (incorrect preposition and verb form). The sentence structures are simple and often fragmented. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic grammar, such as subject-verb agreement and tense, are pervasive throughout the text.
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