Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In recent years, some people consider to travel through other transports while avoiding air planes to the benefit the environment, other individuals arguable say that this is not that beneficial for the environment but it just making difficulties on their workload and businesses. From my opinion the latter statement is more logical and the demerits of it outweigh its merits.
On the one hand, the air plane do not effect that much of our nature. Primarily, to avoid the fly we are just elevate our challenges at our workload. To be more precise, it will later on affect the economy and our personal growth by it is so time consuming and it make our jobs more demanding.To exemplify, in many countries the authorities prefer the aircraft over any other mean of transports because of its effectiveness and accessibility. Additionally, it play a crucial role in saving our time for other vital works.
On the other side, the flights are so prevalent among the
among the people it at some point making our pollute our environment. Predominantly, the aircraft and air planes make so much noise which disturb the nature and stress the people by its problems.
To conclude, although, the planes pollute our nature, the benefits of flights are so many which overcome its negative affect. Significantly, the flights make a balance at our career due its time efficiency and safety. So, I firm
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you have a clear position, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient depth. For instance, the claim that air travel does not affect nature is a broad generalization that is not supported by evidence. The conclusion is also incomplete, ending abruptly. To improve, you must expand on your points with more specific examples and ensure the essay is fully developed to meet the length requirement, which will allow for a more thorough exploration of the environmental versus economic arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'On the one hand' and 'On the other side'. There are also issues with logical progression; for example, the transition between the environmental impact and the economic benefits is abrupt. Some sentences are disjointed, making the flow of ideas feel somewhat forced. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified topic sentence that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'workload', 'nature', and 'problems', which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. There are also several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'avoid the fly' instead of 'avoid flying' and 'make our pollute' instead of 'cause pollution'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to environmental and economic topics. Expanding your range of synonyms will also help you avoid repeating the same words throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the air plane do not effect' and 'it play a crucial role'. Additionally, there are errors in word order and sentence structure, such as 'some people consider to travel' and 'it just making difficulties'. The range of sentence structures is limited, and the errors in basic grammar are noticeable throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct verb forms, and basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures.
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