Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Flyin is the mindblowing innovation in the all history. Some individuals believes that the reduction of fly may helpful to environment, and they consider that all should stop fly altogether. This essay shall discuss both, advantages and disadvantages in following paragraph.

To commence with, disadvantages has wider range than advantages. Flying is the fastest way in to transport one place to another place since it is innovation and also helps to save time. In addition, it provides comfortable transportation service than other form of transport. airplane is the easiest form of transportation and traffic issue are more less in the flying then other transport. If any type alter of this type of transportation may lead to disconnect the global connectivity as well as international trade. Countries who lived based on the major import and export become poor. Furthermore the demand a price of such product will arise due to inadequate source. strong countries become more powerful and poor countries lead to drastic lack of needed stock it also affects the stock market, it is directly impact on the investors.

One other hand, this development has several advantages. it can reduce the environmental pollution and helps to pretect birds that are flying at highest level of atmosphere. Due to the airplane's chemical containing gas, the environment is directly polluted.

To put it in nutshell, i pen down saying that both views has serious threat for environment and people's daily routine. government should take action to reduce pollution due to the airplane to preserve local birds and atmosphe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the environmental benefits and the disadvantages for individuals and businesses. However, the position is not clearly maintained throughout the essay. The development of ideas is limited; for instance, the argument regarding 'global connectivity' and 'international trade' is mentioned but lacks specific examples or logical depth. The conclusion is abrupt and incomplete, failing to provide a clear summary or a final verdict on whether the benefits outweigh the disadvantages. To improve, you should ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that your arguments are fully extended with concrete examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. While transition words like 'To commence with' and 'Furthermore' are used, they are sometimes applied mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between 'any type alter' and 'global connectivity' is difficult to follow. The final paragraph is incomplete, which disrupts the overall flow and structure of the response. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a unified focus would significantly enhance coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Flyin is the mindblowing innovation' (Flying is a significant innovation) and 'traffic issue are more less' (traffic issues are fewer). Some words are used incorrectly, such as 'pretect' (protect) and 'atmosphe' (atmosphere), which appear to be spelling errors or incomplete words. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise, academic terms and focus on using words in their correct context, while also paying closer attention to spelling accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'Some individuals believes' and 'disadvantages has'. Article usage is frequently incorrect or missing, for example, 'in the all history' and 'airplane is the easiest'. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'Countries who lived based on the major import and export become poor'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and sentence endings. A focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement is essential.

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