Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays. In these year, people are more preffer going on flight rather that buses. However, from few years a significant number of people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly year year and I firmly believe that it is a this decision will brings a a positive impact on society.

Initially, if people control the number of times they fly everyyear, it will provides benefical things. Not only a country, but in a worldwide. The major benefical activity is that it helps to reduce arrpollution. Due to airplanes and private jets air is polluated. furthermore, because of air pollution, people can't breath properly and it also spreads numerous disease from one place to another place. On the top of that, A airpots occupied a large area of land and airpots disturb other people by

On the other hand. Although it has several disadvantages for instance, a person can go his work on time through airplane and it is very comfortable for him and also it helps to ulize or manage his time, but if they decide not to go anywhere from plane, he experienced a lot of diffcurties in his journey by bus or cars. Moreover, it take more time than plan.

In conclusion, Despite of knowing that going by bus takes more time and unfortable for them people choose this because they know than planes are more dagerous for entronment and human health and flight tuckets are expensive than buses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt but fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you present a position, the arguments regarding the environmental benefits versus the disadvantages for individuals and businesses are underdeveloped. For instance, the point about airports occupying land is left unfinished, and the discussion on business impacts lacks specific examples or depth. To improve, you should expand on your points with more detailed explanations and concrete examples to ensure the task is fully addressed. The conclusion is also somewhat abrupt and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often hindered by fragmented sentences and unclear transitions. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Initially', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion', their usage is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'On the top of that, A airpots...'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between ideas is disrupted by frequent grammatical errors. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'preffer', 'arrpollution', 'polluated', 'airpots', 'ulize', 'diffcurties', 'unfortable', and 'dagerous'. These errors, combined with awkward collocations like 'provides benefical things', occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise, academic terms and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation. Using synonyms instead of repeating words like 'fly' or 'benefical' would also enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('it will provides'), article usage ('A airpots'), and sentence structure ('Nowadays. In these year...'). Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to follow. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using articles correctly. Proofreading your work for these common errors is essential before submitting your final draft.

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