Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Public have finalized that they will overcome the travelling every year or controll to travel with eachother.
According to my point of view the majority is living abroad and they have to fly for different purposes.Moreover, it should be beneficial for atmosphere but it can creates many issues on economy.I am totally disagree with this statement because the number of people are dependent on foreign currency.They are working in different countries and their families are in other cities or countries.Its not their choice to fly its their problem.They must have to fly and comeback to their families.
On the other hand, many people travel for their jobs and business.Moreover,students also fly for their studies.For an example last month we all family visited London by Qatar airways and we all have to attend the marriage cermoney of our cousin brother.Due to these youth have to travel.
There are many foreign deligations who visited our university and they also conduct seminars and workshop.It is beneficial for the progress of our country and university.
Additionally, some people travel to visit other countries nd they went on vacations its good but some time it creates environmental issues.without any reason and with whole family flying can be problometic and there are some other issues like high jack and plan crash.
To conclude that i am totally agree with travelling.But who have decided to reduce the number of flying if they are travelling without any reason so that they must have to overcome it if everyone will think like that then we can also overcome environmental issues.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but struggles with clarity and logical development. While you identify both sides of the argument, the position is inconsistent; you state you are 'totally disagree' with the idea of reducing flights, yet later suggest that people should 'overcome' unnecessary travel. The ideas are somewhat under-developed, relying on personal anecdotes (e.g., the London trip) rather than broader societal or economic analysis. To improve, ensure your position is clearly defined in the introduction and maintained throughout, and focus on expanding your arguments with more general, analytical reasoning rather than specific personal stories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the overall structure. However, the logical progression between sentences is often weak. The use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or misused, such as the abrupt transition 'Moreover' or the confusing use of 'For an example'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that supports your main thesis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'overcome the travelling' instead of 'reduce air travel' and 'atmosphere' instead of 'environment'. Some phrasing is non-idiomatic, such as 'cousin brother' and 'high jack'. To improve, you should focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to the environment, economics, and global travel. Avoid using informal or imprecise language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it can creates'), tense usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'They must have to fly and comeback'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect prepositions.
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