Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Some individuals finalize that they decline the boarding while others plan to stop flying completely. I think it is not a good way to stop flying altogether because it can hampers businesses and individuals also.
So, choose a wise decision is the best way for environmental development.
To begin with, today's every one have there own work in different location. So other transport may take so much time, Where as they choose flight . Which is suitable and mange the time properly. For instance some VIP or citizens have there daily base work in different areas , So they choose flight in daily . While others like me, i choose for trip or occasion. Moreover , for me its not essential but those who have actual business or meeting they can not cancel flight. Government also profitable through this booking. However if it closed for a long time people faced obstacles as well as company also face the disadvantages.
Secondly, if we stop some domestic flights for development purpose ,it may works. While who need very much we can provide the service and those work is not important and may happen in future then we cancel some flights and run only necessary one. Specially the international fights are not cancel. So the department may continue the development and may concern about like how people may not face difficulties during the development work . It can work if people wisely decide to book the flying time or reduce the number of flights during the resolution. We can not stop flying altogether. However the employees face problem in salary and some face the unemployment.
In conclusion, i suggest complete stop flying altogether is not good way for all solution. So, we can decided to reduce the flight flying number.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the environmental benefits versus the disadvantages of reducing air travel. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. The position is clear, but the arguments lack depth and specific examples. For instance, the mention of 'VIP or citizens' is vague and does not effectively illustrate the economic impact on businesses. The essay tends to over-generalize, and the conclusion simply restates the position without synthesizing the arguments. To improve, you should provide more concrete examples and explain the causal links between the environmental impact and the economic consequences more thoroughly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While there are attempts at cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Secondly', they are sometimes used incorrectly or mechanically. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'While who need very much we can provide the service', which makes the logic difficult to follow. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a clear flow, making it challenging for the reader to track the argument's development.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'finalize that they decline the boarding' instead of 'decide to reduce flying' and 'Government also profitable' instead of 'The government also benefits'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. You rely on basic terms and struggle with the correct form of words, such as using 'fights' instead of 'flights' and 'mange' instead of 'manage'. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic and topic-specific terms would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('every one have there own work'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'So, choose a wise decision is the best way for environmental development.' The range of structures is limited, with a heavy reliance on simple sentences. Complex structures are attempted but are often faulty, leading to confusion. Improving your control over basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement is essential.
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