Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Several individuals have contemplate to decrease the ratio of times they travel through planes every year or does not fly at all. In the modren world air travel has become common and necessary. Almost all of the businesses are dependent on planes to transport their goods. Numerous individuals travel on daily basis. Why i believe that reducing the numbers will have a detrimental effect on businesses and normal individuals? This will be discussed oin this essay.
To begin with, the problems this can create for a common person. First of all demand and supply, when individuals will stop travelling through air planes and number of cargo will be decreased. The demand will be lower than before. Evantually because of low demand the supply will decrease. Inoccent individuals who had nothing to do with this. They will have to pay extra for the same seat which was affordable before. Furthermore Store owners on sites like Etsy, Ebay and Amazon are exporters when the prices of cargo will be increased as a result they will have to increase their price in both circumstances who is going to suffer more is an individual.
Apparently there are no evidences for the rumors that any development will have by reducing flights in addition there are no benefits an individual will have neither ecnomical or enviormental.
In conclusion, from my perspective than drawbacks of this are very bad. Only individuals will have to face the consequences.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address the prompt, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack depth. You mention the impact on businesses and individuals but do not provide sufficient evidence or logical progression to support your position. Furthermore, the conclusion is abrupt and does not effectively summarize the main points. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with concrete examples and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical (e.g., 'To begin with', 'First of all', 'Furthermore'). Paragraphing is present but the ideas within the paragraphs are not well-connected, making the flow of the argument disjointed. You need to use a wider range of linking words and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea to improve the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and spelling errors, such as 'modren', 'Evantually', 'Inoccent', 'ecnomical', and 'enviormental'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To achieve a higher band score, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items, and pay closer attention to spelling and accurate word formation. Focus on learning collocations related to environmental and economic topics to enhance your precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Several individuals have contemplate', 'number of cargo will be decreased'), sentence fragments, and incorrect verb forms. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. Complex sentence attempts are often faulty, which affects the clarity of your message. To improve, you should practice using a variety of complex structures, such as relative clauses and conditional sentences, while focusing on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with verb tenses and pluralization.
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