Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In recent years, people decides to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether but this development was prodigious impact on individuals and businesses.
People decides to reduce the number of fly they flew over a year. They thinks that they can benefited for environmental development, while people thinks only for itself because reducing the number of times helps their to save the free hours and used it for another activity and also saved money.
There disadvantaged was it can detrimental effect on individuals or businesses because many people travels abroad for attending their business meetings and further related events. For instance, a survey conducted by researchers they showed the reduce in number of fly every year also effect of economy growth and airline companies.
Overall, when the number of flights increased the economy were growing faster than expected because airlines had more capacity to accommodate passengers and the staff more efficiently behaved than other transportation services.
In conclusion, people decides to reduce im number of fly they fly every year but there was a problem for businesses. I believe increasing in number of times we fly were indispensable for economy growth and also airline industries .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address both sides of the argument, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence. The position is somewhat clear, but the lack of depth prevents a thorough exploration of the environmental benefits versus the economic disadvantages. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with specific examples and ensure you reach the required length to fully address all parts of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often hindered by unclear referencing and awkward transitions. For example, the phrase 'There disadvantaged was it can detrimental effect' is confusing and disrupts the flow of ideas. While you use some basic cohesive devices, they are often used inaccurately or mechanically. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'people', 'number', and 'fly'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'number of fly' instead of 'number of flights' and 'prodigious impact' used incorrectly in context. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To improve, try to learn collocations related to environmental and economic topics and avoid repeating the same words throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people decides', 'they thinks') and tense consistency (e.g., 'the economy were growing'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often marred by errors that can impede the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent throughout the essay. Practicing the construction of complex sentences will also help improve your range.
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