Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent past years flying with plane become so common. That use of trains and other public transpot rates dropped rapidly. However, in today's world people decided not use air planes much often. Or reduce the numbers they fly together. Because people often travel more with their friends,family and collegues.

The carbon that emmit from planes are very dangerous for our environment and leads teward health problems.

Their are significant advantages of using plane less. Concequently, their are many disadvantages.However benifits outweigh the drawbacks.

The gases emmit from planes has very dangerous affect on our environment and green house.It also causes pollution which has bad impact on ecosystem. The pollution also leads toword extreme climate change which refers toward acid rain. Therefore, Environmental gain of using the planes less is huge. One more profit is lower numbers of airpots, which naturally leads toward less deforestation. In china, their are less airpots because they understands the need of natural resources and and trees,which often cut down to make buildings. Therefore, this positive development has huge impact on society.

If we talk about the downsides of this decision many touring countries might lose their in-come.And many meetings may got delayed.

However, people can use trains and other transports for travelling purpose if they had to travel in the region. and use technology for meetings.Today face to face meetings are very common, Which reduce the number of times people travel.

As there are many drawbacks of this choice. But advantages really overshadows the disadvantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both the environmental benefits and the disadvantages for individuals and businesses. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention pollution and climate change, the points are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. The discussion on disadvantages is brief, mentioning only tourism and meeting delays without sufficient elaboration or concrete examples. To improve, you should aim to expand on your arguments with more detailed explanations and specific, relevant examples. The position is clear, but the overall development of the argument is superficial, which limits the score to a 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. You use some cohesive devices like 'However', 'Therefore', and 'Consequently', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or feel mechanical. For example, the transition between the environmental benefits and the disadvantages is abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'Therefore, this positive development has huge impact on society', where the link to the previous point about China is weak. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'emmit' (emit), 'teward' (toward), 'Concequently' (Consequently), 'benifits' (benefits), and 'airpots' (airports). Additionally, some word choices are imprecise, such as 'touring countries' instead of 'countries reliant on tourism' and 'lower numbers of airpots' instead of 'reducing the number of airports'. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and practice using more sophisticated collocations to express your ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The gases emmit... has', 'their are many disadvantages'), article usage ('with plane'), and sentence fragments ('Or reduce the numbers they fly together'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. While you attempt complex structures, they are often faulty. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex sentence forms.

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