Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Environmental concerns are the biggest concerns in the world. Many people believed that not using an tess air transportation or reduce the flying anually causes the bear advantages to the tax surroundings. However, I will discuss my explan-ations before giving my opinion.

To begin with, there are several benefits for the environment. First and foremost is the less utilization usage of renewable resources. This is because of the tess people who are stop using the that means less flights needed and air travel then, there consumption of fuel decreases. Gasoline and oil prices are surged up because of the usages. Secondly, if there are less number of commuters that means there will be reduced on the amount of air pollution.

the other side, not to stop travelling

is just not a solution because there

are other factor to which causes

environmental concerns. At lot of places

people are cutting trees to construct

the houses which is cons for the

surrounding or to maintain a fresh

air.

However, not to stop flying every

year means an individual will reduce

their self growth. This is due to

travelling a person get a chance

to broaden their horizons, explore

different cultures and gain sence

of community. If people stop exploring

the world than it hard to

understand different culture and diversity.

The other thing is that to enterpreneurs

- loss their changes to loss gain popularity

- or expanding their business. Sometimes,

- a businessman finds a nice deal from

- international markets.

- In conclusion, although to reduce the

air travelling advantages to the

environment at some point while there are

other factors too to protect the environment

and I believe that its a disadvantages

to stop exploring the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the environmental benefits and the disadvantages for individuals and businesses. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While the environmental benefits are mentioned, the explanation is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. The discussion regarding disadvantages for businesses is fragmented and presented in a bulleted list format, which is inappropriate for an IELTS essay. The position is clear, but the overall structure and the lack of cohesive development prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure that each paragraph contains a fully developed argument rather than brief, disconnected points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical flow. The use of paragraphing is problematic, particularly the inclusion of bullet points in the latter half of the essay, which disrupts the coherence of the argument. While some basic cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'In conclusion' are used, the transition between ideas is often abrupt or confusing. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall progression of the argument is hindered by the disjointed structure. To improve, focus on using clear topic sentences and linking words to connect ideas within and between paragraphs, and avoid using bullet points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'bear advantages' (likely meant 'major'), 'tess air transportation' (likely meant 'less'), and 'surged up'. Some phrases are repetitive or awkward, such as 'less utilization usage'. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary related to the environment and business, the errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. A wider range of vocabulary and more precise word choices are needed to move to a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('if there are less number of commuters'), incorrect word forms ('explan-ations', 'sence'), and sentence fragments. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some errors in complex constructions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of bullet points and erratic line breaks. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and proofreading to eliminate minor slips.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.