Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
most of the people believe that decided to reduce the number of times to fly every year then stop flying altogether.
Overall, the people has fly many times in a year by rise the ticket prize reduce to fly many time in a year due to ticket prize many people are stop flying altogether, the individuals can travel alone many time for the organization work are communicate with clients, the environmental can always support while travel, they reduce crucial busy with their organization, family, children by travel with children its take a difficult issue .
In conclusion the individuals reduce number of times to fly every year due to their work pressure the parents both are stop flying together to other countries.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 122 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. The essay does not clearly state a position on whether the environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages, and the arguments provided are fragmented and lack logical development. The prompt asks for a balanced discussion regarding environmental benefits versus individual and business impacts, but the response is too brief to address these points adequately. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low score for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the ideas within them are disjointed and difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas, making the flow of the argument very mechanical and confusing. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraph is abrupt, and the conclusion does not effectively summarize the preceding points. The lack of logical progression makes it difficult for the reader to identify the writer's main argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'ticket prize' instead of 'ticket price' and 'crucial busy' which is grammatically incorrect. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the misuse of words often impedes the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning collocations and using a wider variety of topic-specific vocabulary related to the environment and travel.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that make it difficult to understand. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the people has fly'), sentence structure, and tense usage. The essay relies on simple, often fragmented sentences, and there is no evidence of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also used incorrectly, with run-on sentences and missing commas. These errors are pervasive and frequently impede communication, which is characteristic of a lower band score.
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