Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

2013 , after 2013 it rose and in 2016 it reached to 22,000.

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In current period more and more people travel by plane in their day to day life .some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether . so this development is not outweigh the disadvantages because disadvantage are more than benefits.

To begin with today because of the global warming some people choose to not travel by flight , they think that it is help environment to reduce polution , Aeroplane reduce a huge amount of carbon dioxide and it is harm the air and polute

the environment. Moreover, flight consume a thousands of liters fuel for fly, when people stop to fly it saves large amount of fuel and people may have to chance to travel by buses, cars, railways and other travel options.

On the other hand, airplane is most important travel method, it is takes a short period of time to reach the place by the airplane Businessman and other people usually travel to other countries for their works. It is the fastest way for travel. Furthermore, if flight are close it is directly affect businesses and other people such as students and travelers. student face difficulties to study in abroad, family members do not meet their relatives, and companies do not expand their markets in foreign they love opportunities, it is hard to meet international clients, and tourist are do not travel in different countries.

To sum up, reducing flight are good for environment and healthy life style but it is take bad impact on business and on people who travel for their personal work, businesses.

do not expant their area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt, but the position is somewhat unclear and lacks depth. While you mention that disadvantages outweigh benefits, the arguments are repetitive and lack specific, well-developed examples. The inclusion of irrelevant data at the beginning (about 2013-2016 statistics) suggests a misunderstanding of the task type, as this appears to be a leftover from a previous task. To improve, ensure your ideas are fully extended with logical reasoning rather than just listing potential negative impacts. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is often interrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand' are used, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is disjointed. For example, the transition between environmental benefits and the shift to business disadvantages is abrupt. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall progression of ideas feels mechanical. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence logically follows the previous one would significantly enhance the readability of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'travel', 'people', and 'things', and there are several instances of incorrect word choice or collocation, such as 'if flight are close' (should be 'cancelled' or 'grounded') and 'they love opportunities' (likely meant 'lose'). There are also spelling errors like 'polution' and 'expant'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items related to the environment and business, and ensure they are used accurately in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('airplane is most important', 'flight consume'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'Aeroplane reduce a huge amount of carbon dioxide and it is harm the air and polute the environment.' You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy, such as pluralization and verb tense consistency, is essential for improvement.

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