Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
FEW MANKIND'S DECIED HAVE TO REDUCE THE NUMBER OF TIMES THEY FLY EVERY YEARLY OR TO STOP FLYING ALTOGETHER. I SHED SOME LIGHT ON ADVANTAGE OR DISADVANTAGE FOR WHICH VINDICATION WILL BE ELEBORATE ABVE THE UPCOMING PARAGRAPHS.
TO START WITH, THE ENVIROMENT OF THE DEVELOPMENT OUTWEIGHT FOR INDIVIDUALS AND BUSINESSES , THE FIRST AND FOMOST IS , ITS TRUE THAT MOST OF THE PEOPLE USE FLIGHT FOR TRAVLING OTHER COUNTRY AND BUSINESSES TRIP BUT MOST FLIGHT IS CONSUME THE PETROL AND ITS POLUSTION HAS ENVOLEVE THE AIR AND INFEFCTED POLUSTION CONSEME THE AIR AND MOST OF THE PEOPLE ARE INFECTED .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 250 words, standing at only 101 words. This severely limits the candidate's ability to address all parts of the task or develop a fully formed position. While the writer attempts to introduce the topic regarding the environmental benefits of reducing air travel, the ideas are heavily restricted, underdeveloped, and presented in a superficial manner. Consequently, the task is only addressed in a minimal way, resulting in a low band score under Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text suffers from significant structural and organizational issues. The introduction consists of disconnected, highly flawed template phrases and poor framing (e.g., 'I SHED SOME LIGHT ON ADVANTAGE OR DISADVANTAGE FOR WHICH VINDICATION WILL BE ELEBORATE ABVE'). The essay contains only one body paragraph that runs multiple complex thoughts into a single, confusing sentence without proper logical progression or pauses. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, and the paragraphing does not adequately structure the argument, making the flow difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary range is extremely basic and impeded by severe spelling and word-choice errors throughout. Examples include 'DECIED' for decided, 'YEARLY' for yearly/year, 'ELEBORATE' for elaborated, 'ABVE' for above, 'OUTWEIGHT' for outweigh, 'FOMOST' for foremost, 'TRAVLING' for travelling, 'PETROL' for fuel, 'POLUSTION' for pollution, 'ENVOLEVE' for involved, and 'INFEFCTED' for infected. These errors severely strain the reader and indicate a very limited control over lexical items and spelling conventions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical accuracy is very poor, with frequent, severe errors across almost every sentence. The response lacks control over basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and verb tenses (e.g., 'FEW MANKIND'S DECIED HAVE TO REDUCE', 'MOST FLIGHT IS CONSUME THE PETROL'). Complex structures are attempted unsuccessfully, resulting in broken syntax and non-standard phrasing. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, causing considerable difficulty for the reader in grasping the intended meaning.
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