Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people decided to the reduce of the number of the times they can fly to every years to stop flying altogether.

They have a many benefits of the environmental and the outweigh of the disadvantages.

First of all, the many people of the decided to the reduce of the number and they cannot fly altogether .I am this statment is the disadvantages. and the some people fly together and the many people do not fly in the together. Many people decided to the reduce of the number of the times they people can not fly in the together.

Second of all, The some people they cannot believe in the fly. and the some people was affrid was the fly. and the some of the death and the do not fly together. and the many people was using the businesses meeting. and the many people was affrid the fly. and they cannot be used to fly. many people asked the some question and they people cannot fly in the altogether.

To sum up, and the many people was affrid was fly. They can think I was died. And some people was very affrud to fly altogether and the many people cannot affrid to the fly and and they flying to the every years altogether and the people decided to the reduce of the number of all times and the the people cannot stop fly altogether. Many people stop to the flying altogether and some people do not believe in the flying altogether. and some people affird was the flying.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response addresses the general topic of reducing air travel for environmental benefits, but the development of ideas is severely hindered by severe repetition and lack of clarity. The student attempts to discuss environmental benefits and disadvantages related to fear of flying and business meetings, but these points are expressed in a very repetitive and fragmented manner. Sentences such as 'some people they cannot believe in the fly' fail to construct a coherent argument or position. The task is addressed only minimally and tangentially, as ideas are not properly extended or supported, aligning closely with the descriptors for Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisational structure of the text is heavily impaired. Although the student attempts to use paragraph markers such as 'First of all', 'Second of all', and 'To sum up', the internal progression of ideas is absent. Sentences are disjointed, and cohesive devices are used inaccurately or repetitively, such as the excessive repetition of 'and the many people'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the paragraphs consist largely of repetitive restatements rather than logically sequenced points. Referencing and substitution are frequently faulty, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information, placing the response at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student frequently misuses common words and phrases, such as 'reduce of the number', 'believe in the fly', and 'affrid' (afraid). There is no successful attempt to use less common or academic lexical items, and word choices often distort meaning or strain the reader's comprehension. Errors in word formation and collocation are pervasive throughout the response. This performance fits the Band 4.0 descriptor, where basic vocabulary and frequent errors limit precision and expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of poorly constructed simple and attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. Errors in grammar, tense usage, and article placement are constant, such as 'Some people decided to the reduce of the number' and 'some people was affrid was the fly'. There is a complete lack of error-free sentences, and basic structures are frequently mishandled. These frequent, pervasive errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort the meaning of the statements, corresponding to a Band 4.0 score.

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