Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some individuals have decided to minimize the figure of travel by air or to stop flying altogether. I believe that environmental advantages does not outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses. The reduction in numbers who travel by air does not improve the environmental benefits,because the gasses by other transport methods still damage the ozone layer and it also put a financial burden of people as well as government.
Travellers who fly every year in group after this decesion may visit through other modes of transport, so the problem remains same. For example, people who live in European country spent their summer vacations by visiting any other country now travel by car or train. Therefore, the emission of gasses and other still remain the same and which is more dangerous than Aeroplane.
Furthermore, the advantages of People who travel alone will increase after this decesion . This is because, people travel individually require silence and less trafiic at immigration travels. For example, a sergan doctor who visits every year to pursue any operation or attending an international seminars faces lots of difficulties during boarding and travelling. Therefore, after this development it gives more comfort to individuals.
In conclusion, people decided
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether the environmental benefits of reducing air travel outweigh the disadvantages. However, the student's text suffers from a major issue: it is unfinished, breaking off mid-sentence in the conclusion ("In conclusion, people decided..."), and falls significantly short of the 250-word minimum, containing only 200 words. Furthermore, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat confused. For example, the student claims that alternative transport emits gases that are "more dangerous than Aeroplane," which is factually weak and inadequately supported. Because the essay is under-length and the ideas are under-developed, it meets the criteria for Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the overall progression is disrupted by the abrupt ending of the text. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., starting consecutive paragraphs with "Furthermore" and relying on simple connectors). Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph consists of only four words before trailing off completely, which severely impacts the structural flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence "the advantages of People who travel alone will increase after this decesion," which does not logically follow from the previous paragraph. Overall, the cohesive framework demonstrates characteristics of Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, such as "reduce the number," "travel by air," and "advantages and disadvantages." There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as "minimize the figure of travel," "spent their summer vacations by visiting... now travel," and "sergan doctor." Spelling errors also occur, such as "trafiic" and "decesion." While the student attempts some less common terms like "immigration travels" and "international seminars," the frequent inaccuracies and limited range place this response firmly in the Band 5 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., "environmental advantages does not outweigh" and "gasses by other transport methods still damage... and it also put"). Punctuation and article usage are also problematic, such as missing articles before nouns ("in European country") and incorrect prepositions. Because the essay is truncated and errors are frequent enough to occasionally cause confusion for the reader, a Band 5 score is appropriate.
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