Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In many countries, individual taking flights every year for their own purposes. Many people believe that they will reduce this ratio for environmental benefits. I believe that, this decision will be benefecial for every human beieng.
To begin with, the first reason is pollution. To elaborate, nowadays many people flies in different countries for tourism and business purposes. As a result due to flights pollution increased beacause many individual complete their journey with cars, at airport , due to this pollution increased rapidly. Moreover, nation's GDP will be a biggest benefit. To explain, some individuals stablished their business in other countries and this a concern for GDP. For intance, bussiness mans like Ambani and Adani, if they will do business in their own country Nation's GDP will increase because products will prepare on high level.
Additionally, Employment is also will increase. To elaborate, if individual will do business in their own country, many people can get employment, such as people who lives in remote ares, they do not have seource of income, as a result they can earn money. to reduce flights can be benefecial for both individual and businesses.
In conclusion, In my opinion, while this trend have disadvatages , however benefits are more, because through this many people can get employment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt regarding whether the environmental benefits of reducing air travel outweigh the disadvantages. However, the response falls significantly short of the 250-word minimum, containing only 213 words. This under-length issue directly impacts the level of development and places a strict ceiling on Task Achievement. While the writer states a clear position that environmental benefits and employment gains outweigh disadvantages, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence. The arguments regarding GDP and business are confusingly articulated, referencing specific businessmen like Ambani and Adani without adequately linking them to the core question. Due to the limited word count and insufficient development of ideas, this response satisfies the criteria for Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which provides a basic structural framework. However, the overall progression of ideas lacks clarity and logical flow. While cohesive devices such as 'To begin with,' 'Moreover,' and 'Additionally' are used, they are often applied mechanically or inappropriately given the context of the arguments. For instance, the transition into economic benefits feels abrupt and disjointed from the environmental point. Referencing and pronoun use are sometimes unclear, making it occasionally difficult to follow the writer's train of thought. Paragraphing is attempted but lacks the internal cohesion required for higher bands. These organizational and cohesive shortcomings align well with a Band 5.0 score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic and repetitive, struggling to convey precise meaning. The writer relies heavily on simple terms and makes frequent word-choice and spelling errors, such as 'benefecial' instead of beneficial, 'beieng' instead of being, 'stablished' instead of established, and 'ares' instead of areas. There are also inappropriate collocations, such as 'products will prepare on high level.' While the student attempts some less common vocabulary like 'environment' and 'employment,' the control over these items is weak. The lexical range is minimally adequate for basic communication, but errors are noticeable and occasionally impede understanding, which clearly reflects a Band 5.0 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex structures are frequently faulty, leading to ungrammatical phrasing such as 'In many countries, individual taking flights every year for their own purposes' and 'Employment is also will increase.' There are pervasive errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation throughout the text. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and obscure the intended meaning in several places. Because the control of grammar is weak and error-free sentences are scarce, this performance corresponds to a Band 4.5.
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