Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It can be observed mostly people try fly every year because they want freshment and observe the nature views. Secondly Enviornment play a crucial role in our life. From my perspective flying one place to another place is very facinating and create new experience and make us confident. Enviornment make our health perfect and build a concentration for focus on work. These two factor play a significant role in every human being life.

Firstly, I probablty from this statement fly is very necessary. People learn alot of lesson from this situation. Flying one country to another make us confident and spread a positive impact on our thinking and on us. Mostly people like to fly bacuse fly is their dream and ambitious because they want to observe the nature and their beauty. For example, me and my friend make a plan for observe the nature beauty by plane. W e booked our tickets and enter in plane for naran visit . In plane we learn alot of things like meet with stranger and dealing others. Secondly we saw alot of view of naran by plane. Nature is a blessing for us and fly also. because we observe the view from fly. Its look like a paradise.I always adviice to everyone enjoy the journey with fly not by bus or car.

Secondly, environment is most benefical for development of anything at businesses area or a individuals site. Environemt play a significant role in our life makeus healthy and build our concentration. If a person eat healthy he she maily focus on work through the impact of environment. For example, if a indivuduals or businesses area start a construction work so good environment is crucial like sunlight . through sunlight the construction work is easily attempt and winde up in few days. Moreover, create a good enviorment in compny and institute is very crucial. Workers always inspired from good sellery and good behaviour. Create polite and peacefull environment in the organization.

In contrast, both factor are very crucial for make our mind set for work. Both factor promote our thinking stule and provide good dealing skill. We learn alot of lesson from these activities.

Yet both have some disadvantage, during fly people are die dew to plane crash and mostly people waste their huge amount on buying tickects and visits. Furthermore, employes did not create good relation. less sellary and huge pressure of work create hurdles for the workers.

In conclusion, flying nd environment play a crucial role in our life. both are more benefical for us. We experience nd build our experience through these experience.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding the environmental benefits of reducing air travel compared to disadvantages for individuals and businesses, but it struggles significantly with focus and task interpretation. The writer frequently conflates 'flying' with 'environment' and wanders off into general statements about nature and health. For instance, the discussion on construction work and sunlight is only tangentially related to the prompt. While a position is stated, the ideas are often under-developed, repetitive, and lack clear support tailored to the specific question of whether environmental benefits outweigh disadvantages. These limitations align closely with the Band 5 descriptor, where the task is addressed only partially and ideas remain limited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, and the writer attempts to use transition markers such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion'. However, the overall organization lacks a clear logical progression. Ideas jump abruptly between flying, personal confidence, nature views, business construction, and worker salaries without a smooth conceptual bridge. Referencing is frequently unclear, and cohesive devices are used mechanically or repetitively. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph coherence is disrupted by fragmented sentences and shifting topics. This reflects the characteristics of Band 5, where there is some organization but no clear overall progression and cohesive devices are inadequate or faulty.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally impede understanding. Examples include 'freshment' instead of refreshment, 'facinating' instead of fascinating, 'bacuse' instead of because, and 'sellery' instead of salary. The student attempts some less common items such as 'benefical', 'ambitious', and 'peacefull', but these are often used with incorrect collocation or grammatical forms. The range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, meaning it falls into Band 5, where noticeable errors in word choice and spelling cause some difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response, featuring a very limited range of structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty or incomplete, such as in 'If a person eat healthy he she maily focus on work'. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, prepositions, and punctuation. For example, 'mostly people try fly' and 'employes did not create good relation'. These errors occur with high frequency and often cause difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 5 due to frequent errors and a lack of control over complex sentence forms.

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