Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Now a days almost all country their are alot of flights and busy airports. In the sky we see a many plans in a day. For this reason few people decide to decrease another country visits. In this eassy we discuss both advantages and disadvantages.
On the one hand, individuals travel too much, in our earth we are around 8 billions. So when in these billions there are some people who traveling around the world. When people travel, a huge number of plans using and a big problem is air pollution. There is alot of using fuels and electrcity. Impact on envirnment. Air travel produce significant carbon emission. Some old flights can reduce pollutionand greenhiuse gasses. For instance, when some plans were crash we saa a to much damage areas and face land pollution.
On the other hand, in my side of thinking, when flights are may reduce it will the effect on people who linked with traveling community. Sach as staff. Traveling business loss their customers and opportunities. Overseas separated with their families, some people take flights to meet their family and some attanding to meetings, and also youth have no options to futher continue their educations and jobs on their dream countrieas. In addition some tourism also effected.
In conculision, both advantages and disadvantages are effect on our lifes and businesses. Government should replace few plans who reduse air pollution and effect the ecosystem. However, individuals may should avoid extra travel, they use alternatives like online meetings and using trains. It will be benifically for our envirnment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address all parts of the prompt by discussing both the environmental benefits and the disadvantages of reducing air travel for individuals and businesses. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat superficial. For example, the writer mentions that reducing flights affects staff and tourism, but these points are not fully extended or supported with specific, clear examples. The position is somewhat unclear due to abrupt shifts in the argument, although a general stance is visible. The response satisfies the basic requirements of addressing the prompt, but it falls under Band 5 because the ideas remain under-developed and the overall treatment of the task is restricted.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into four distinct paragraphs, including an introduction and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor transitions and unclear referencing. For instance, transitional phrases like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' are used, but the internal flow of ideas within paragraphs is disjointed and confusing, such as jumping abruptly from population statistics to plane crashes. Cohesive devices are often inadequate or inaccurate, and paragraphing, while visually present, lacks cohesive unity. These issues place the response firmly in the Band 5 category for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by numerous spelling and word-choice errors. Examples of awkward phrasing and lexical errors include 'Now a days', 'plans' instead of 'planes', 'eassy', 'envirnment', 'greenhiuse gasses', and 'benifically'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'significant carbon emission' and 'ecosystem', the frequent inaccuracies in spelling and collocation cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and restrict the range to a level that is only minimally adequate, corresponding to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response, featuring a very limited range of sentence structures. Most complex sentence attempts are faulty, and there are frequent basic grammatical errors, such as 'almost all country their are alot of flights', 'few people decide to decrease another country visits', and 'when flights are may reduce it will the effect'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and sentence fragments. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and pull the score down to Band 4, as error-free sentences are very rare.
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