Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Due to environmental concerns,some people have lessen or completey stop their travel through planes. In my opinion, the advantages of this decision has numerous benefits that we may ignore its disadvantages.
Millions of people move for meetings, studies and for different purposes within and outside country everyday using airplanes. airplanes uses fossil fuel that creates air pollution at high level and develops health hazards for every living organism. If individuals decides to travel
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response is severely under-length, containing only 73 words compared to the minimum requirement of 250 words. Because of this extreme shortfall, the task cannot be fully addressed, and the ideas presented are left heavily under-developed. Although the writer attempts to introduce a position regarding the environmental benefits of reducing air travel, the argument cuts off mid-sentence (‘If individuals decides to travel...’), preventing any thorough exploration of the advantages or disadvantages for individuals and businesses. Consequently, this falls well short of the criteria for Band 5, earning a Band 3.5 due to the minimal development and incomplete nature of the response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text begins with a clear introductory sentence and attempts to present a logical sequence by introducing a topic and then offering a personal opinion. However, because the text breaks off abruptly after only three incomplete paragraphs, overall coherence and progression are severely hindered. Paragraphing is attempted, but the lack of completion makes it difficult to assess organizational control beyond a basic level. Cohesive devices are minimal, relying on simple connectors like 'Due to' and 'If'. The absence of a completed argument limits the score to Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a basic vocabulary with attempts at topic-related terms such as 'environmental concerns', 'air pollution', and 'fossil fuel'. However, there are notable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'lessen or completey stop' instead of 'lessened or completely stopped', and 'travel through planes' instead of 'travel by plane'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and spelling errors like 'completey' further restrict the score. The vocabulary is minimally adequate for conveying basic concepts, aligning with a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writing contains a mix of simple and emerging complex sentence structures, but it is marred by frequent grammatical errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues like 'the advantages... has numerous benefits' and 'airplanes uses', as well as missing punctuation and capitalization errors (e.g., lowercase 'some', 'airplanes'). The text cuts off mid-sentence, leaving grammatical structures unresolved. Due to the high frequency of basic grammatical errors relative to the short output, the grammar warrants a Band 4.5.
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