Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many people tend to decide that they want to overcome the flight time in every year or close flying. This statement desribe the advantages for enviormental solutions and other side associate with loss in business and people. I discuss both effects in this dicussuion.
On the one hand, the number of individuals want to stop flying in air buses for the solution of environmental issues. However, mostly air buses has been use advance thechnology to reduce the fuel consumption. For example, Franch scientists already claim eco-friendly thecnology in planes. Thus, advance research alrerady solved environmental issue or poluttion.
On the other hand, the international business individuals totally affected by stop flying. Despite of this advantage is prominent, If people reduce trip time for reduce the fuel consumption. For example, many individuals want to fly for foreign country and have nemorous offices all over the world. They must be make a main head office for this purpose. Thus, these types of people are incredibly benifical of company.
With the both of view, I tend to believe that environmental benificts are not over weigh on the disadvantages
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response addresses the prompt minimally, attempting to discuss both the environmental benefits and the disadvantages for businesses. However, the ideas remain severely limited and under-developed, lacking sufficient extension or concrete examples from broader knowledge. Furthermore, an important issue is that the length requirement is not met, as the response contains only 185 words, falling significantly short of the 250-word minimum. The writer's position is discernible at the end, but the overall task coverage is only partial, resulting in a low score for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The text demonstrates some organisation with basic paragraphing and general attempts to structure the essay into an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are often inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, such as the mechanical and incorrect use of transition markers like 'On the one hand', 'However', and 'On the other hand'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making the flow of arguments somewhat disjointed for the reader, placing the response firmly at this band level.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, showing a limited range that is only minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'desribe', 'enviormental', 'thechnology', 'nemorous', 'benifical', and 'benificts'. These errors and awkward collocations occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and impede clear communication, demonstrating the characteristics of this specific band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer employs a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex structures that are faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with verb forms and tenses (' mostly air buses has been use advance thechnology'), missing articles, and incorrect prepositions. These frequent errors cause strain and difficulty for the reader, though the core meaning of the sentences can still be partially deciphered.
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