Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this modern era, the peoples reached no peaks now some pople have decided to reduce the number of time hey fly every year or to stop flying altogether. From my perspective i dont think the the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses i think fly is many benefits.

One of the main reason, many people grew up there bussinesses in other country they go there for there bussiness also to full fill the wishes of there family but in any emergency situations if the government reduce the number of flights or stop how they will come back there home in the critical situations. For instance, Many citizen go aborad for trip in hoildays they enojyed there after few months or days there hoildays will come to end but the flying is not avilable due to reduce flyings how they will come back home there career go to in danger zone also there children school addmission may be cancelled due to unnecessary leaves. As a results prove that, the flying play a vital roles in communities.

Another many reason, our country mostly depend on other countries is a fuel way, also more country transported things like food, jackets. Furthermore, many other equipments from other advance countries. For example in my hometown the youth using online plateform and orded things like jackets other equipments from anothere country which all things come from abroad through the flying transportation. If the flying reduce or stop we face many critical situations. Moreover, Many peoples have bussinesses agency of transportation those send people muslims community to sudia arabia for performing ummrah and hajj through the airplans.

In conclusions, i think the individuals and bussinesses of this development outweigh the disadvantages for environment emissions. Government should have improved there system and airplans in digital advancments era emit less pollution into the environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that the disadvantages of reducing flights outweigh the environmental benefits, and you offer relevant examples involving family emergencies, holidays, imported goods, and religious travel. However, the response only partially addresses the comparison in the question: it explains several costs of fewer flights but says very little about the environmental benefits or weighs the two sides directly. Some examples, such as cancelled school admission and businesses depending on air transport, are asserted rather than explained, and the conclusion introduces emissions without developing their significance. The position is also weakened by the unclear final sentence. To strengthen the response, explain both sides and show why the disadvantages you identify are more important. The response contains 291 words; 21 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly group related points: personal consequences first, then trade and transport. You also use signposts such as “For instance,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusions.” However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several claims are joined together without clear explanation, and the second paragraph shifts from imported goods to pilgrimage transport without showing how the points connect. Repeated rhetorical questions and phrases such as “Another many reason” make the argument feel repetitive rather than steadily developed. Use clearer topic sentences, organise each paragraph around one main reason, and use linking expressions only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “environmental benefits,” “transportation,” “emergency situations,” and “pollution,” and you try to discuss business, travel, and imported products. However, the range is limited and many word choices, collocations, and spellings are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning hard to interpret. Examples include “the peoples reached no peaks,” “grew up there bussinesses,” “online plateform,” and “digital advancments.” Repetition of “flying,” “many,” and “critical situations” also limits precision. Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and word forms. More precise expressions such as “air travel,” “operate businesses,” and “air freight” would help communicate your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including conditional forms such as “If the flying reduce or stop we face many critical situations.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation can make the reader work to understand your meaning. For example, “the flying play a vital roles” has problems with subject–verb agreement and number, while “how they will come back there home” has an unclear grammatical structure. Capitalisation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add a subordinate clause with correct verb forms and punctuation. Greater control of these basic patterns would make your argument much easier to follow.

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