Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

these days mostly individuals travel through airlines few think that they should minimize the travel plan or just stop traveling through airplanes. i strongly beleive that it should benificial for environment if reduce the travel plan but also stop traveling by plane is not a solution it also effect business and every individuals tiem table.

first of all every body need to limit their travel plans because its affect environment and contribute in temperature rise. people travel by plane when they argent need other wise they avoid such plans because airplanes release more toxic gasses in the atmosphere rather than any other vehicles for example if people take one flight in each year when if they need it they save more fuel and also protect atmosphere

there are some problems if you stop using airplanes because its the convenient way to travel for long distance if people use car or other vehicles for travel they also consume same amiunt of fuel for that which altemately release same amiunt of gasses also this affest the global economi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a relevant position: reducing flights can benefit the environment, while stopping air travel altogether may harm individuals and businesses. You also offer reasons, including aircraft emissions and the convenience of flying long distances. However, the response addresses the question only partially: the disadvantages are mentioned briefly, and the effects on businesses are not explained with a specific example or clear development. The environmental argument is also general, and the example about taking one flight a year is difficult to follow. The response is 176 words, so it does not meet the 250-word minimum. Develop both sides with specific explanations—for instance, how fewer business flights could affect trade, while alternatives such as video meetings could reduce that impact.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting fewer flights, and a paragraph describing disadvantages. Connectors such as “first of all,” “because,” and “for example” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression is limited: the final paragraph introduces several points—convenience, fuel use, emissions, and the global economy—without explaining how they relate. Some references, such as “that” in “they save more fuel,” are unclear, and the conclusion is missing. Use one main idea per paragraph, explain each point in sequence, and add a concluding sentence that restates your judgement. More precise linking between cause and effect would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “environment,” “atmosphere,” “fuel,” “airplanes,” and “global economy,” so the reader can identify the subject of your argument. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “argent need,” “same amiunt of fuel,” and “affest the global economi.” Repetition of “travel,” “people,” and “planes” also restricts expression. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing emissions and travel choices, and check spelling carefully. For example, “greenhouse-gas emissions” and “alternative transport” would help you express the environmental comparison more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if people take one flight in each year.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to follow because clauses are joined without clear grammatical control, as in “if people use car or other vehicles for travel they also consume…” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are frequently missing, and errors with articles, agreement, and verb forms occur throughout—for example, “every body need” and “it also effect.” These problems sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check articles and agreement. Use a small number of accurate complex structures, such as “If people fly less, emissions may fall,” before attempting longer sentences.

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