Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowadays, many peole travel the airplane, helicopter and many vehicles but present time travel short time best is fly rout. People choose the fly routs beacuase no more time spent the travel time. Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every years or to stop flying altogether. I think enviromental benifits of this development outweight the both advantages as well as diadvantages but more advantages.

One of the important benifit is no carbon emmission. Many people reduce the numebr of times they fly every years also decreas the carbon emmission. Not many carbon emmission good for our enviroment and wealth are good. People can't sick for the enviroment problem because the carbon does not produce high amount in our enviroment. While people can be not stop but reduce the fly small amount of carbon emmsion in our enviroment.

Another benifit is the our enviroment is not pollution and not harm the human health as well as our nature. However, people can think reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether it is the good for our enviroment. Also benifit in economy system one family as well as natinal economy. If people can reduce the fly reduce the carbon emmison and poeple are not harm with results are best for the good health.

In conclusion, some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every ywar or to stop flying altogether. It is good for our enviroment as well as high amounth of benifit in human.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You take a position that reducing flights is environmentally beneficial, and you mention lower carbon emissions, pollution, health, and the economy. However, the task asks whether these benefits outweigh disadvantages for individuals and businesses, and your response does not explain those disadvantages or compare them with the benefits. The claim that the change benefits the economy is also unclear and unsupported. Your ideas are therefore only minimally developed and the response addresses the question only partially. The response contains 219 words, below the required 250; 40 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To improve, discuss specific costs to travellers and businesses, then weigh them against environmental gains and support your view with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic overall shape: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The paragraphs also broadly group environmental benefits together, which gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because ideas are repeated or connected unclearly. For example, the second paragraph repeats the point about reducing carbon emissions, while “People can't sick for the enviroment problem because the carbon does not produce high amount” is hard to interpret. Linking words such as “However” and “Also” appear, but they do not consistently show clear relationships between ideas. Use one paragraph to explain environmental benefits and another to compare them with disadvantages, with each paragraph developing a distinct point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “carbon emission,” “environment,” “human health” and “national economy,” so the reader can identify the general subject of your argument. However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “travel the airplane,” “fly routs,” and “our environment is not pollution.” Spelling errors, including “peole,” “beacuase” and “enviromental,” are also frequent enough to weaken clarity. Aim to learn accurate topic phrases as complete units, such as “travel by air,” “reduce carbon emissions” and “air pollution.” Check spelling carefully and choose words that express the intended relationship precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response includes some linking structures, such as “as well as” and “because.” However, sentence patterns are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, which makes several ideas difficult to understand. For example, “Some people reduce the number of times they fly every years also decreas the carbon emmission” lacks a clear grammatical connection between its clauses, and “If people can reduce the fly reduce the carbon emmison” does not form a complete conditional sentence. There are also recurring problems with articles, plurals, agreement and verb forms. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then combine them with clear connectors such as “because,” “which means,” and “although.”

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