Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the enviroment benefits of this development outweigh for individuals and businesses its not a disadvantage.We get alot of benefits from the enviroment that evereyone use and also have businesses. Like we have a enviromental light so its a benifits for individuals and also for businesse and it can be for many other purpose getting sorce of energy For example making electricity from that and we use that electricty for power plants machienes . We get some natural food from enviroment like fish vegetable frouits and like many other things .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You state a position in the opening—that environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages—and give relevant examples such as energy generation and natural food. However, the response only minimally addresses the question: it does not explain how reducing flights produces environmental benefits, and it gives no disadvantages for individuals or businesses to compare against those benefits. The examples about light, electricity and food are not clearly connected to flying, so the argument remains largely undeveloped. The response is also 90 words, below the required 250, which leaves too little space to explain and support your view. To improve, discuss flight-related effects such as emissions, then weigh these against costs such as reduced travel options or business connections.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: you begin with your opinion and then introduce examples using “Like” and “For example.” These signals help the reader recognise that you are adding supporting points. However, the ideas do not progress in a clear argument, and the examples move from environmental benefits to energy and food without showing how they relate to fewer flights. There is no developed comparison of benefits and disadvantages, and the response is presented as one continuous block. Use separate paragraphs for your position, environmental benefits, disadvantages, and conclusion. Connect each example explicitly to the point it supports, using linking phrases such as “As a result” or “By contrast.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “environment,” “businesses,” “energy,” “electricity,” and “natural food,” so the general subject is partly clear. However, the range is basic and several words are repeated, especially “benefits” and “environment.” Spelling errors such as “enviroment,” “alot,” “benifits,” and “electricty” make the writing less clear and reduce accuracy. Some phrases are also imprecise: “environmental light” does not clearly express the intended idea, and “many other purpose” is not a natural way to describe uses. Build a more relevant vocabulary set around the prompt, such as “air travel,” “carbon emissions,” “flight frequency,” and “business travel,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to communicate a position and give examples, using both short statements and a longer sentence beginning “For example.” The main ideas can generally be understood, but sentence control is inconsistent. The opening, “the enviroment benefits of this development outweigh for individuals and businesses its not a disadvantage,” is not a complete, well-formed sentence and makes the comparison difficult to follow. Other examples include “We get alot of benefits … that everyone use” and “it can be for many other purpose,” where agreement and plural forms are not controlled. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also weak. Practise writing clear subject–verb sentences first, then combine related ideas with accurate clauses, for example: “Reducing flights lowers emissions, which benefits the environment.”

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