Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is undeniable that airplanes account for global warming due to carbon emisson. Regarding this problem, many individuals are cutting the number of uses airplanes for travel or they choose to not travel by air entirely. Even though, airplanes causes environmental degradation, it is wise to choose not to use this media of travel, whereas, I believe, it has a adverse impact on personnel and businesses.

It is widely known that airplanes needs vast ammount of fossil fuels which increase carbon dioxide in environment, in this case global is becoming warmer day by day. people are deciding not to fly so that they can reduce their personal carbon footprints in order to keep climate safe. In addition,

On the other hand, quiting flying or reducing the flying times comes packed with certain drawbacks. One drawbacks would be people need to go for better treatment in other countries, in that case, they will face severe consequences for choosing not to fly. Another drawback would be

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and give a position: you acknowledge environmental harm but state that reducing flights has an adverse impact on people and businesses. However, the response addresses the question only partially. The environmental point is briefly explained through fuel use and carbon dioxide, while the disadvantage is limited to people seeking treatment abroad; the effect on businesses is not discussed, and the comparison of whether benefits outweigh disadvantages is not developed. The final paragraph also stops mid-sentence, leaving the argument incomplete. The response is 86 words below the required minimum, which restricts the space available to explain and support your ideas. Develop both sides with specific examples, then state clearly which side you consider more significant.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an environmental paragraph and a paragraph about disadvantages. The contrast marker “On the other hand” helps signal a change in direction, and “In addition” suggests an effort to extend a point. However, the environmental paragraph ends abruptly after “In addition,” and the final paragraph stops after “Another drawback would be,” so the progression is incomplete and the reader cannot follow the full argument. Some linking is also awkward, as in “Even though … whereas,” where the relationship between the clauses is unclear. Complete each paragraph, use one clear main idea per paragraph, and connect examples directly to the claim they support.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “global warming,” “fossil fuels,” “carbon dioxide,” “environmental degradation” and “carbon footprints.” These terms show awareness of the subject, but the overall range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which can make meaning less clear. For example, “the number of uses airplanes” is not a natural way to describe flight frequency, and “this media of travel” is an unsuitable collocation. Spelling errors such as “emisson,” “ammount” and “quiting” are also noticeable. Aim for accurate, natural phrases and check spelling; using a few precise terms consistently is more effective than attempting awkward expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a concession structure beginning “Even though” and a purpose clause with “so that.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles and sentence construction are frequent enough to cause difficulty. Examples include “airplanes causes,” “airplanes needs,” and “it has a adverse impact”; these should use plural agreement and the correct article. The opening sentence also combines “Even though” with “whereas” in a way that leaves the relationship between ideas unclear. Practise building complete sentences with one clear main clause, then check subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation before adding subordinate clauses.

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