Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many individuals took initiative to reduce the number of flights per year or to completely stop using aeroplanes as a mode of transport. Advantages of this are reduction in air and sound pollution, and money spend in flight tickets is saved, while disadvantages are business owners may lose clients, and people may not be able to experience different cultures. In my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

The benefits of decreasing the use of aeroplanes for travel are reducing environmental issues like air and sound pollution. Airplanes utilize excess amount of fuel to travel miles which is harmful for surroundings. That is to say that, air-way means of transports release tones of gases and produce high frequency sounds that could be heard from distance. Many people suffer with asthma and other lung disease due to air pollution, and hearing deffects caused by aeroplanes. For instance, survey on environmental crisis showed that more than half of the pollution suffer from lung diseases after air pathways evolved. Therefore, precautions should be taken to reduce the increasing number of aeroplane uses.

The drawbacks are lose faced by business owners and global exposure. The companies who want to expand their business in foreign countries have to travel usually by aeroplanes, if they stop flying, they may lose the opportunity for global expansion. Moreover, young people want to travel different nations for experiencing multiple cultures and is it a dream for many to have a solo trip to tourist places. For example, people from different countries visit India to experience indian culture and explore historical places. But these are materialist things compare to harmful effects air-ways cause to humans.

In conclusion, decision of reducing the number of times to travel through aeroplanes has more benefits than drawbacks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction—“the advantages outweigh the disadvantages”—and you address both environmental benefits and personal and business costs. The discussion of pollution is relevant, and you explain that aircraft fuel and emissions harm health. However, some points are asserted rather than fully supported: the claim about hearing defects and the survey statistic are unclear, and the business argument would benefit from a more specific explanation of how reduced travel affects companies. The cultural-experience point is relevant, but calling these benefits “materialist things” does not fully explain why they are outweighed. Develop each main idea with a clear cause-and-effect explanation or a credible example, and make the comparison between benefits and disadvantages more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for benefits and drawbacks, and a conclusion. This makes your position and the main stages of the argument easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “That is to say,” “Moreover,” and “Therefore” to connect ideas. To strengthen progression further, make the relationship between sentences more precise; for example, “Therefore” introduces a recommendation rather than directly concluding the preceding health claim. Some references are also unclear, such as “these are materialist things,” which could refer to both business opportunities and cultural travel. Use more exact transitions and refer back to ideas by naming them, while ensuring each paragraph develops one central point in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “air pollution,” “global expansion,” “foreign countries,” and “historical places,” and you attempt less common expressions such as “environmental crisis.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “money spend in flight tickets,” “tones of gases,” “drawbacks are lose faced,” and “air pathways evolved” make parts of the argument difficult to interpret. Spelling and word-form errors such as “deffects” and “indian” also reduce accuracy. Build a reliable set of collocations for this topic—for example, “aircraft emissions,” “noise pollution,” and “lose business opportunities”—and check that each chosen phrase expresses the intended meaning naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “if they stop flying, they may lose the opportunity for global expansion,” and most of the argument remains understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless affect clarity. Examples include “Many individuals took initiative” (missing an article), “people may not be able to experience different cultures” alongside the ungrammatical “and is it a dream,” and “more than half of the pollution suffer from lung diseases,” where the subject and verb do not form a clear sentence. There are also problems with agreement and sentence construction in “the benefits … are reducing.” Practise accurate article use, subject–verb agreement, and complete clause structures, then proofread complex sentences to ensure their subjects and verbs are clear.

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