Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent year, an increasing number of individual decided to declined air travel and stop flying together in order to reduce air pollution. while this trend pose challenges for economical growth, i believe that advatntages outweigh the disadvantages. It cause can be discuss in details in upcoming paragraphs.

On the first hand, reducing flights has significant drawbacks. Many people travel one nation to another to meet their family members and forign clients for business pupropse. It directly make bad impact on corporate and foreign customers because without it nobody attent phyical meeting and deliver goods timenly. As reult economy suffer. Furthermore, forign tourism also declined and local communities suffer. Some communities income base on tourism, if tourist not travelled to that places it reduced the stanerd of living that directly impact economical growth of the country.

On the other hand, falling number of flights help in protecting green houses effects. On the surface of earth ozone layer is available that protect human body from harmful ultravirus layers, it harm day by day owing to air pollution. When air trasport dip it can be heal automatically. In addition, flight consume more carbon fuel that directly impact environment and economy as fell. Economically government spend more money to buy fuel, when it used to fly the flight air pollution generate. As result, government expent rail network who consumed less fuel and run on electricity.

In conclusin, no doubt it give benefitial to economy and environment as well, but directly effect live of the individuals go live in out of country for better erning.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that the environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages, and you address both sides by discussing business and tourism impacts as well as pollution and fuel use. However, the response only partly develops the comparison the question asks for. The disadvantages are illustrated through family visits, business meetings and tourism, but the environmental benefits rely mainly on broad claims about pollution and the ozone layer. The explanation that the ozone layer can “heal automatically” is unclear and not accurately connected to reduced flights. Your point about investing in rail is relevant, but needs a clearer link to how fewer flights benefit the environment. Develop fewer points with specific, accurate explanations and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for disadvantages and benefits, and a conclusion. This gives the reader an overall route through your argument, and signposts such as “Furthermore” and “On the other hand” help distinguish points. However, some links are mechanical or unclear, including “On the first hand” and “It cause can be discuss in details in upcoming paragraphs.” Within paragraphs, ideas sometimes jump from one consequence to another without showing the relationship clearly; for example, the discussion moves from fuel costs to government spending on rail. The conclusion also introduces an unclear point about people living abroad. Use more precise referencing and explain how each sentence follows from the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “corporate,” “tourism,” “carbon fuel,” “air pollution” and “rail network.” These choices show an effort to discuss economic and environmental effects rather than relying only on basic language. However, the range is limited by frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word forms or collocations, such as “advatntages,” “forign,” “green houses effects,” and “standard of living” written as “stanerd of living.” Some phrases are difficult to interpret, including “ultravirus layers” and “economy as fell.” These errors can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Check spelling carefully and learn topic phrases in context, such as “greenhouse-gas emissions” and “reduce reliance on air travel.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, including conditional structures such as “if tourist not travelled to that places…” This shows some effort to vary sentence forms. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “an increasing number of individual decided,” “reducing flights has significant drawbacks” followed by “Many people travel one nation to another,” and “When air trasport dip it can be heal automatically.” Several sentences also lack clear grammatical connections, as in “It cause can be discuss in details.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking agreement and tense in each clause.

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