Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Reduction in the number of flights can limit carbon emission in the environment. Certain people took initiative towards decreasing or completely eliminating the number of flighties they take annualy.This assay will analyse the advantages and disadvantages of the development. I personally argue that the limitations outweight its benefits.

One among the major advanatges is reduce in the amount of carbon relased from the aeroplanes, this decreases the proportion of carbon which mixes with the natural air and creates polution. In this way this step can benifit the atmosphere to maintain its purity. Moreover, people can contribute to the development of their mother country without migrating to the other. Because this might increase the economy of the country with increase in jobs and skills. Which allows them to fund for the sustainable development of their mother land. For instance, people in China stays in their own country and contibutes in its developments.

However, reducing the migration will results in less explortaion of the nature, when people visit new country they try to explore new cultural and environmental values, which help them to gain their general knowledege about the nature. Furthermore, reduced flights resitrict educational knowledge and carrier opportunities, when a student is ristricted to their home country the amount of knowlege he may gain form foreign may be reduced, as a result it effects the nature. If students dont migrate they cannot invent new susta

In conclusion, although its benifits such as, reduction in carbon emission and growth in the development of the country, its drawback like, reduced environmental exploration and limited carrier options are greater. In my view, limiting us to our country will direclty impact our personal development. With sustainable practices pollution created by air transports can be minimised making them environmental friendly practices.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that the disadvantages outweigh the environmental benefits, and you identify relevant benefits such as lower aircraft emissions. However, the response only partially addresses the comparison in the question. Several disadvantages you discuss—migration, cultural exploration, and students’ career opportunities—are not clearly linked to flying less, since people may travel or study abroad by other means or for longer periods. The point about people contributing to their home country is also difficult to connect to the environmental benefit. The example about China is broad and does not substantiate the claim. Develop a few directly relevant effects on individuals and businesses, explain how they compare with emissions reductions, and support your position with specific reasoning or examples. The final sentence also introduces a qualification that is not reconciled with your conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “In conclusion” help show the intended structure. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first body paragraph moves from emissions to migration and national development without clearly explaining the links, while the second shifts among tourism, education, and employment. Some connections are unclear, as in “as a result it effects the nature,” and the second body paragraph ends with an unfinished idea (“they cannot invent new susta”), disrupting the flow. The conclusion repeats the main points but adds a new claim about sustainable practices. Group related ideas, use clearer cause-and-effect links, and ensure each paragraph develops a complete line of reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “carbon emission,” “sustainable development,” “cultural and environmental values,” and “career opportunities.” This shows some range, but the usable vocabulary is limited and frequent spelling, word-form, and collocation errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “flighties,” “annualy,” “polution,” “explortaion,” and “knowledege”; phrases such as “fund for the sustainable development” and “explore new cultural and environmental values” are also awkward. Choose accurate, natural expressions and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for the task—such as “air travel,” “aviation emissions,” “international business travel,” and “tourism revenue”—would help you explain the trade-offs without relying on vague wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple sentences and attempts at longer structures, including clauses introduced by “Because,” “when,” and “as a result.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries can make the argument hard to follow. For example, “people in China stays” has subject–verb disagreement, “reducing the migration will results” combines incompatible verb forms, and “Which allows them” is an incomplete sentence. The unfinished clause near the end of the second body paragraph also prevents the idea from being understood. Practise building complete sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses accurately. Check agreement and verb patterns, and use punctuation to separate complete ideas.

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