Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the advance era, the debate over reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether has intensified. Some peoples are in favour to stop flying, while some advocate for reduce the number of times they fly every year. I believe that environmental benefits of this development has merits, flying remain essential.

Proponents of stop flying argue that environment should be improve of developing that approach. For example in COVID 19 when there is restriction on flights. researches said that environment is too good or clean as compared to before Covid.

Nevertheless, completely abolished the flying is intervene growth and productivity. Many students moving abroad for studies or work. Also countries need labour for their countries betterment. Furthermore individuals cannot meet their relatives or businesses cant abke to attend meetings. In addition the greater impact is that individuals not able to explore the histories of countries and their mysterious places.

In conclusion, while flying has demerits but we can not deny the pros. Diminished the flying can not outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses. So my perspective is that , considering a holistic or balanced approach. Government put limit on every individual in every year. Also Government focus on planting more trees and using sustainable activation fuel or better savage system. Furthermore took a decision to avoid pollution that is produced by vehicles, which is a great chaos. So after that world should be transformed better

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a position—that environmental gains do not outweigh the disadvantages—and mention relevant effects on students, workers, families, and businesses. However, the position is not consistently expressed: the opening says flying “remain essential,” while the conclusion calls for limits without clearly explaining how these support your answer. The environmental case is especially underdeveloped; the COVID example is brief and does not explain what changed or how reduced flying helped. The response addresses the question only partially, with ideas stated rather than supported by specific reasoning or examples. It is also below the required 250 words: 219 words, with 23 words copied from the prompt excluded. Develop the comparison of environmental benefits and practical costs, and explain your examples more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting an environmental argument, a paragraph on disadvantages, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through your ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and several points are introduced without being connected or explained—for example, the move from students studying abroad to countries needing labour, then to tourism. Linking phrases such as “Nevertheless,” “Furthermore,” and “In addition” help signal relationships, but their use can feel mechanical, and the conclusion introduces new proposals about trees and fuel rather than clearly synthesising the argument. Group related examples and use clearer references to show how each point supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “environmental benefits,” “growth and productivity,” “relatives,” and “businesses,” so the main subject is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural choices make parts difficult to understand, such as “environment should be improve of developing that approach,” “mysterious places,” and “sustainable activation fuel or better savage system.” Some expressions appear to be attempts at more formal vocabulary but do not convey a clear meaning. Spelling and word-form errors, including “peoples” and “abke,” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise, familiar collocations first, such as “reduce emissions,” “sustainable aviation fuel,” and “waste-management systems,” and check each phrase for its intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the response is divided into sentences that usually communicate a basic point. However, grammatical control is weak: errors are frequent, and some make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “Some peoples are in favour to stop flying,” “environmental benefits … has merits,” and “Many students moving abroad,” where agreement, verb forms, or sentence structure are faulty. The conclusion also contains incomplete or awkward constructions, such as “considering a holistic or balanced approach” and “Government put limit.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences, then add subordinate clauses only when you can control their verb forms and punctuation. Proofread for articles, agreement, and complete sentences.

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