Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in the modern era, travel through by air is most common way of transportation in which many businesses men, travel loving persons etc fly every year. In which, some people argue that we need to make a decision to less the use of air transport every year or we need to stop flying altogether. Yes, people like businesses men and individual will effect to much with disadvantages but on other side that also effect environmental condition if we travel more through by air.

We need do not travel by air or in any way of transport with out any reason because that effect environment. Also for Businesses man e.g., if businesses man need to do meeting with his client if that is possible to do meeting online through zoom. Than Businesses man need to do meeting online and also satisfy client like they are present physically with businesses man. Through that both person do not need travel by air or any other sources.

But if that are manadatory to travel and also to reach fast than that are option to travel by aeroplane we should avail that technology. Because through that we save our time and also through that travel by air also shortcut method to reach any destination.

In conclusion, i will say people can not avoid transportation by air but he can reduce that number of times they fly every year or month through if they are stay more on one side to complete his pending work to travel less from one place to another place. Also that give benefits to environment as well as outweigh the disadvantages for individual and businesses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the central question by arguing that people should reduce unnecessary flights, while recognising that air travel remains useful when speed or business needs make it necessary. The online-meeting example is relevant and gives some support to your position. However, the comparison of environmental benefits with disadvantages for individuals and businesses is only partly developed: you mention saving time and meeting clients, but do not explain in detail how these costs compare with the environmental gains. Your conclusion says the benefits outweigh the disadvantages, but this judgement could be stated more clearly and supported with a specific reason. Develop both sides more fully and keep your position consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion, and the ideas generally follow a relevant order: unnecessary travel, online meetings, the continuing value of flights, then your final view. Linking expressions such as “But” and “In conclusion” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several sentences repeat the same point about avoiding air travel without adding a new reason. References such as “that” and “they” can also make it difficult to identify exactly what or whom you mean. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each example directly to the argument, and vary or clarify referencing to make the line of reasoning easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “environmental condition,” “transportation,” “client,” and “destination,” so the main subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning awkward: “businesses men,” “less the use,” and “shortcut method” are examples. Repetition of “travel,” “air,” and “businesses man” also restricts precision. Aim to learn topic-specific phrases in natural combinations, such as “reduce air travel,” “business travellers,” and “a faster way to reach a destination.” Check spelling and word forms as well, including “mandatory,” to make your meaning clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional example about a business meeting and a contrast between necessary and unnecessary flights. However, control is weak across many sentences, and errors can make the reader work to understand the meaning. For example, “people like businesses men and individual will effect to much” has problems with agreement, number and sentence structure; “We need do not travel” also has an incorrect verb pattern. Articles, verb forms and punctuation are often missing or inconsistent. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses using patterns such as “If a meeting can be held online, businesses can avoid flying.”

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