Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people try to reduce the number of fly every year or to stop flying. Although It have many advantages such as reduction in carbon emission and clean air for different spieces, It also have disadvantage on over economy and businesses.

To begin with its disadvantages on our economicial conditions such as if flying become reduce it block the way of tourisam that effect our economy and shares. As a result the 1/4 amount of fundings become band for our countries.

For example, if some one is not coming to see the beauty of our country and don't investing his money in our businesses it can effect as very sharply.

An other disadvantage is given to the international and national businesses is that they are not able to transport the material, in addition they are not able to meet with the trader of different countries which effect their trust factor. For example, If a company is starting a project with international company of UAE from pakistan they need to sit and make a deal face to face if they are not able to do it it may cause lose of deal.

Furthermore it also effect the overseas people who are living in an other countries to fulfil there desires. As a result, the country is not able to take a fund from anyother country which make our country difficult to servive.

In conclusion, it is not possible to stop flying because it can contain about most of our economy and businesses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a position in the conclusion, arguing that stopping flying would harm the economy and businesses, and you give relevant examples involving tourism and international trade. However, the response focuses almost entirely on disadvantages and does not explain the environmental benefits or directly weigh whether those benefits outweigh the costs. The opening briefly mentions reduced emissions and cleaner air, but these points are not developed or supported. Some claims, such as the statement that a quarter of national funding would be lost, are unclear and unexplained. To strengthen the response, discuss both sides and make the comparison explicit, then support each main point with a clear explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, several paragraphs about disadvantages, and a concluding position. Linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” help signal the sequence. However, the overall progression is limited because the environmental side is introduced but then abandoned, so the argument does not build towards a balanced answer to the question. Some connections are unclear: the point about overseas residents and a country receiving funds is not sufficiently explained, and “As a result” does not always show a clear cause-and-effect relationship. Use paragraphs to group distinct arguments, and make each example clearly support the point immediately before it.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “carbon emission,” “tourism,” “international businesses,” and “trust factor.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make parts difficult to understand, such as “economicial conditions,” “fundings become band,” and “servive.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “block the way of tourism” and “contain about most of our economy.” Aim for precise, familiar collocations rather than forcing complex expressions: for example, explain that fewer flights could reduce tourism revenue or make international meetings less convenient. Careful proofreading of spelling and word forms would also make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some longer sentence forms, including conditional examples beginning with “if,” and the main message is generally recoverable. However, attempts at complex sentences are often faulty, and errors recur in basic structures. Examples include “Although It have,” “if flying become reduce,” and “they are not able to meet with the trader … which effect their trust factor.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. There are also inconsistent capital letters and punctuation, such as capitalising “It” mid-sentence. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check that each subject matches its verb and that conditional clauses use appropriate verb forms.

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