Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

On this present day, the individuals have mind to pause travelling together across the world or to reduce the number of flying every single year.I argue that the ecosystem relief of this initiative can effect the populace and business owners.

Firstly,the war have been effect the middle east and europe as much according to our expectations.Due to this war,the individuals want to travel ess and stay most of his time into his hometown

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a relevant attempt to discuss reduced flying and refers to possible environmental relief, but it does not answer the central comparison: whether environmental benefits outweigh disadvantages for individuals and businesses. The position is unclear in “I argue that the ecosystem relief … can effect the populace and business owners,” and no disadvantages or business impacts are explained. The point about war in the Middle East and Europe is not clearly connected to the environmental effects of flying. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words, so the task is only minimally addressed and the ideas remain undeveloped. State a direct position, then explain and support both the environmental benefits and the costs to people and businesses with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: “Firstly” signals a point, and the writing moves from the general topic to a comment about travel during conflict. However, the response ends before a clear line of argument develops, and the relationship between the war and reduced flying is not explained. The opening and the following paragraph do not establish a clear progression towards an answer to the question. Some linking is attempted, but punctuation and spacing make the connections harder to follow, as in “Firstly,the war” and “Due to this war,the individuals.” Use separate paragraphs for your position, benefits, disadvantages, and conclusion, and make each transition show how the next idea supports your argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “ecosystem,” “individuals,” “business owners,” and “travel,” so the general subject can be identified. There are also attempts to express less basic ideas, such as “ecosystem relief.” However, several choices are unnatural or unclear, which limits precision: “pause travelling together across the world” does not clearly convey reducing flights, and “the number of flying” is not an idiomatic phrase. “Effect” is also used where a different word is needed in “can effect the populace.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and repeat key terms such as “air travel” or “flight frequency” rather than using unclear paraphrases. This will make the argument easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both a longer opening sentence and a cause-and-effect construction with “Due to this war,” showing some effort to vary sentence forms. However, control is uneven: “the individuals have mind” has an incorrect verb pattern, “the war have been effect” has problems with agreement and verb form, and “stay most of his time” has unclear agreement and sentence structure. Articles and prepositions are also not consistently controlled, as in “into his hometown.” Missing spaces after punctuation and the run-on presentation further affect readability. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and pronoun agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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