Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

youngers think to make decision proportion of time every year and try to stop flying amd focus environment benefits and their development program authorty of business

firstly some people decide to forget the daily flight because the reason of flight schedule and also flight expenses on the other hand people fly every year job purpose and work and alot of sector in my openion people always use to flight because the saft and time too much not conducted and also good facility of the flight and airport department is also good i give that my best friend example, he always prefer flight becuase the good journey and better facility and if he work like pakistan but their company in dubai so he mosly use fly every year and every month

on the other side , like talking about environemt best facility and development of government and people thinking and business factors similarly environment is the best role of business and development program for example lek eduacation system is play very important role of environment policy and business policy also whereas, business also play role of environment like petrolium businesss and transports businesss although fruit business facility

in clusion and my openion environment authorty and business polices both side play main rle to reduce like pollucion and traffic problems

for ecample my best frient working environment department and also work business but he play both role equal and solve the problem of people and try to cure better environment and implement nice facilities of people and youngester and children

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response makes a limited attempt to discuss the topic, but it does not clearly answer whether the environmental benefits of reducing flights outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses. You mention reasons people fly, such as work, convenience and facilities, and refer to pollution and traffic, so some relevant points are present. However, the discussion shifts to broad ideas about government, business and the environment without explaining how fewer flights would affect them or comparing benefits with disadvantages. The examples about your friend’s work in Dubai and a friend in an environmental department are difficult to connect to a clear argument. State your position directly, then develop one environmental benefit and one individual or business disadvantage with specific explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into stages, using phrases such as “firstly,” “on the other side” and “in clusion.” These signals show an effort to guide the reader, and the response includes examples. However, the ideas do not progress in a clear sequence: the opening is difficult to understand, and the paragraphs move between flight costs, work travel, business, government policy and pollution without clear links. Some connectors, including “similarly” and “although,” do not show the relationship between the ideas that follow. The conclusion also introduces a friend’s role rather than summarising a reasoned answer. Use one paragraph for disadvantages and another for environmental benefits, with each paragraph centred on a single main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the subject, including “flight expenses,” “environment,” “pollution,” “traffic problems” and “business policies.” This gives the response some topic-related language, and a few phrases communicate recognisable ideas. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or unclear, as in “youngers,” “authorty,” “saft,” “petrolium businesss” and “play main rle.” Several expressions, such as “forget the daily flight” and “best facility,” do not convey the intended meaning naturally. Repetition of “business,” “environment” and “facility” also limits precision. Build a small set of accurate phrases for air travel and its effects, and check spelling and collocations before using less familiar vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “although” and “whereas.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence formation and verb patterns often make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “he mosly use fly every year” lacks a correct verb construction, while “fruit business facility” is not formed as a complete sentence. Subject–verb agreement and articles are also unreliable, as in “business also play role.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention, particularly where several ideas are joined in one long sentence. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas using accurate clauses.

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