Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many ratio of population has makeup their mind to travel by plane as less as they can to reduce the environmental effect. As less flights definetly cause less emission of carbon and less damage to environment.

Some consequences may be result if all the flights will be abondoned, as some disadvantages are economic crash, less interactional dealing with companies and many more. Crash of economy is the most big problem going to happen with this strike and tickets will be more expensive. Kerosine oil prices may drop and the things on airports will be more costly. Now if we talk about the advantage going to happen are drop in burning fuel price, less polution, less carbon emission and drop in air polution. As we know due to increased population of the world number of flights have also been increased

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify relevant effects, including reduced carbon emissions and pollution, alongside possible economic harm and higher ticket prices. However, the response only minimally answers the central question: it does not clearly state whether the environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages, and the ideas are mostly listed rather than explained or supported with examples. The discussion also ends abruptly after noting that flight numbers have increased, without developing this point or reaching a conclusion. The response contains 139 words, which is 111 words below the required minimum; this leaves too little space to address both sides fully. To improve, state your position in the introduction, explain the main effects on individuals and businesses, and support your comparison with a relevant example before concluding.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces reduced flying, and the next paragraph mentions disadvantages before turning to advantages. Connectors such as “As” and “Now if we talk about” signal some movement between ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several points are compressed into one paragraph, and the relationship between them is not always clear. For example, “Kerosine oil prices may drop and the things on airports will be more costly” is not linked clearly to the economic argument. The final sentence introduces population growth but does not explain its relevance or lead to a conclusion. Use separate paragraphs for your position, each side of the comparison, and the conclusion, with clearer links between claims and explanations.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “carbon emission,” “environment,” “economy,” “companies,” and “fuel,” so the reader can identify the subject of the response. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “Many ratio of population,” “interactional dealing,” and “the most big problem.” Spelling errors, including “definetly,” “abondoned,” “Kerosine,” and “polution,” also reduce accuracy. Some repetition of “less” and “drop” makes the ideas sound basic. Build a more precise range for discussing environmental and economic effects, and check spelling and common collocations. For instance, use “a large proportion of people,” “international business dealings,” and “a major problem.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and some basic meaning is understandable, as in “Kerosine oil prices may drop.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently. Examples include “Many ratio of population has makeup their mind,” “As less flights definetly cause,” and “if all the flights will be abondoned.” The opening also begins with a sentence fragment: “As less flights definitely cause less emission…” These problems sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to interpret. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use conditional structures accurately—for example, “If flights were reduced, emissions would fall.” Review singular/plural agreement and articles when editing.

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