Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, Some people think that should not be fly frequently, because it is effecting to environment. i believe that more have benifits rather than drawbacks by air plan. i will explain in below paragarphs.

On the one hand, flying is not environment friendly, when plan is flying, this is releasing carbon doxcide , which is not good for health. Whiching is causing of more dangours diseses, As a result, people can travel by bus, car instead to take short and quick flight.

On the other hand, flying can save time and comfort. when people have any emerygency, They can trvel by plan to save time and energy reach on desigination. For example, The one femous clebraty have not enough time to trvel by car or train because he needs emergency surgery. He took short flight and reach on time. As a result, fligt save his life. Apart from this, reducing air flight also effect on bussiness, many products counteris buying from each other of air fly will stop . People loss their bussiness and also some countries can not complete pubic demands. Further more, in moder era, people are living in oversea, when plan will stop, they can not meet to their love's one.

In conclusion, air fly shuld not be stop properly, it effect alot to bussinesses but Governments can make some rule and regualtion so every can not travel every where and any time so people will use in limit but the benifits are more compared to disadvantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question and give a clear overall view that flying should be limited rather than stopped. The points about emissions, urgent travel, businesses, and people living overseas are relevant. However, the environmental benefit is only briefly explained, and the response does not directly weigh its scale against the disadvantages. The emergency-surgery example is difficult to follow and does not clearly establish why flying is necessary, while the claims about trade and public demand need more explanation. To strengthen the response, develop one or two specific comparisons—for example, how reducing frequent leisure flights could lower emissions while essential business or medical travel continues—and keep your position consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” signal the intended stages. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven: the second body paragraph moves from emergencies to business trade and then family visits without clearly linking these points. Some connectors are used mechanically or do not express the relationship accurately, as in “As a result” after the flight example. The conclusion also introduces rules without clearly summarising the comparison. Group related disadvantages together and use clearer links to show how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “carbon dioxide,” “emergency surgery,” “businesses,” and “public demands.” However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “air plan,” “dangours diseses,” “femous clebraty,” and “love's one.” Some expressions are also unnatural, including “effecting to environment” and “complete public demands.” These problems fit a basic, repetitive vocabulary range with errors that can strain the reader. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and collocation; for example, use “aircraft,” “greenhouse-gas emissions,” and “meet consumer demand” accurately rather than relying on repeated forms of “fly” and “effect.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You try to use both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea in “when people have any emergency” and a reason-result structure in the flight example. However, the range is limited, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in verb forms, sentence construction, articles, and agreement occur throughout: “Some people think that should not be fly frequently,” “this is releasing,” and “people loss their bussiness” are examples. Capitalisation and punctuation also make sentence boundaries unclear, as in “Whiching is causing…” after a full stop. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add clauses with “because,” “although,” and “if.” Proofread each sentence for a clear subject, correct verb form, and complete structure.

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