Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Environment plays an essential part in our daily life ,now a days people have know about the environment very well . Without a good environment we cant survive a healthy and life .now we can discuss in this eassy their benefits and disadvantages.

for begin with if some people make a decision to decline the flying travel it may cause some consequences .I believe that most of the people are going abroad for various purposes which inclludes their trips ,work or going to some specific tasks .now a days everyone are busy so if they reduce their flights they have trouble for managing their work or to become successful in their career , they cannot propely their schedules .becuase if they support theis decision firstly they should be discipline and do their work and manage their meetings at home .but the main hurdle for the tourists owing to different visiters wanna explore different cultures and also for some people who are suffering from the mental breakdown they wanna explore more .

Through alot of traffic in roads and sky we face various health issues .pollution are the crucial section if our government should take initiative steps so we can get through it ,now vehicle are the need of everybody but with the ease we also deal with the issues , it disurb our environment the different voices of vehicles who disturbed the specially old person ,Throwing garbage is also the main factor here people are without any shame throw waste on the roads which makes our environment are inappropriate .

In my opinion government should do a powerful steps that the peace and beauty of our environment remains same , some people should avoid to fly who have any work they will go there ,we should together create our envronment clean with strict rules through the government that everybody should follow if they cant follow they deal with the heavy fines.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You recognise that the question asks about environmental benefits and the disadvantages of reducing air travel, and you give a view that people should avoid flying when possible while governments enforce environmental rules. However, the response only partially addresses the comparison. The paragraph about work, careers, tourism and mental health identifies possible disadvantages, but these points are not clearly weighed against the environmental benefits of fewer flights. The discussion of pollution shifts to road traffic, noise and litter, which are not directly connected to the effects of flying. To strengthen the response, explain specific benefits of reduced air travel, such as lower aviation emissions, and compare their importance with the practical costs to individuals and businesses. Make your position explicit and support it consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, discussion of disadvantages, environmental concerns and a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, progression is difficult to follow because the main comparison is not sustained: the discussion moves from work and tourism to road pollution, noise and litter without clearly linking these points to the question about flying. Connectors such as “for begin with,” “but” and “Through” are sometimes inaccurate or do not show the relationship between ideas clearly. Some sentences also contain several points without a clear sequence. Use focused paragraphs, begin each with a central claim, and link each example back to whether the environmental gains outweigh the costs.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “environment,” “pollution,” “career,” “cultures” and “government,” and you try to express ideas about travel and environmental protection. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For example, “decline the flying travel” is not a natural way to describe reducing flights, and “powerful steps” does not clearly convey the intended action. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “eassy,” “inclludes” and “envronment.” Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check spelling; choose expressions that clearly distinguish air travel from other forms of transport.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “if some people make a decision…” and “because if they support their decision…”. This shows an effort to use more than basic sentence patterns. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Examples include “everyone are busy,” “we cant survive a healthy and life,” and “pollution are the crucial section.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, with several ideas joined together or separated by full stops inappropriately. Practise subject–verb agreement, complete sentence structures and clause punctuation, then proofread each sentence to ensure it expresses one clear idea.

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