Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the world many people fly many time in every year but in the present try to decrise there flying every year or stop flying in a one flight.Although this decision may create difficulties for individuals and businesses, I believe that the environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages.

Firstly, enviromental is one of the importent part of human life and with ou of this human existances would be imposibal.That's why it is a importent part of the human life.Because of the polution in the air people suffered from different harmfull diseases like cancer,heartatact and many more.Therefore, fling craft like aeroplanes, helicopter and other flying vecails produce a huge mount of smoke and used the huge amount of fules.As a result the enviroment will be poluted and produces the hearmfull diseases.

in the other hand, it is not only about the enviromental escapt.many people in the world die by the accident of flying crash. Around 20 thousend of the peoples were die every year by the plain crash. By the fult of the pilot the inocent people have to die with out any reason so that it is so dengerious for travel from one place to another.For example if people used EV car instant otof using plain they were reach dafly to there destination and they also safe the enviroment.

In conclusion, it has some good parts but there are lots of hearmfull part for human.Therefour, it think people should used the land vechail rather then fling craft adn ground vechail also safe the money adn seafty purpose.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear position in the introduction—that environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages—and return to a recommendation in the conclusion. However, the response only partially develops the task’s comparison. Most of the body discusses pollution and alleged plane-crash deaths, while the disadvantages for individuals and businesses are not explained. The claim that around 20,000 people die in plane crashes each year is unsupported and distracts from the central question. The example of using electric cars is relevant to alternatives, but it does not show how reduced flying affects business or personal needs. To strengthen the response, explain both sides with accurate, specific examples and connect each point directly to whether the environmental gains outweigh the costs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “As a result” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of the argument. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear: the first body paragraph repeats that the environment is important and shifts between pollution and disease without developing a focused chain of reasoning. The second paragraph begins with “in the other hand,” but its points about crashes and electric cars do not clearly build on one another. Some linking expressions are inaccurate or repetitive, and the conclusion introduces safety and money without establishing these points clearly in the body. Group related ideas and use transitions that show the precise relationship between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “environmental,” “pollution,” “diseases,” “destination” and “environment,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “enviromental escapt,” “flying vecails” and “huge mount of smoke.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “stop flying in a one flight” and “safe the environment.” These problems fit a basic, repetitive vocabulary range with errors that can strain the reader. Build a reliable set of topic collocations, such as “reduce air travel,” “carbon emissions” and “business travel,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including “Although this decision may create difficulties for individuals and businesses, I believe…” and a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “Because of the pollution…”. These attempts show some variety, but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in “people suffered” and “the environment will be polluted and produces”; articles and plurals are also unreliable, as in “an important part” and “many of the peoples.” Several sentences run together or have unclear punctuation, which makes the relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, then combine them with subordinate clauses, checking subject–verb agreement, tense consistency, articles and sentence boundaries.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.