Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, many people become agree on that, the times of year they travel through aeroplane should be reduce or may fully abandant. This changes can benefit the environment reduce the air pollution but i believe this change also impact the country overall economy and the airline company owners. In this essay i will address this point of view and also find out the pros and cros of this development with examples.

The main advantage of reducing air traffic and fully closed it is that, the environment become less pollutated on the daily basis many flights fly over the sky which emit the toxic gases make weather worse. For example, a plane take off from one continent to another continent during their journey they exhaust carbon dioxide which make environment polluted not bad for us but also for the bird and habitats.

The disadvanges of this changes are, if a aeroplane stop moving and travelling they impact the local economy and as well as the airline businesses, because this play an important role in the country growth travels is main source for many countries. For instance, if a airline industry get reduction in their travelers or no more use of them, so the industry face big crises their systems are very expensives and not be use in others way also a country who's economy relies on the travel agency if get reduction so impact the overall popullation of country. I believe that disadvange cause for problems than one which we solving pollution.

In conclusion, some people agree on that to reduce the number of fly's and altogether stop it fully, this change have one benefit greenhouse reduce pollution but, I believe the disadvantages creates more problems in airline industries or the country growth, which can make in suffers make peoples.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that the disadvantages outweigh the environmental benefits, and you address both sides of the question. The discussion of pollution is relevant, with the example of aircraft emitting carbon dioxide, while the economic paragraph identifies effects on airlines, travel-dependent countries and their populations. However, the position is not consistently expressed: the introduction says the change “can benefit the environment” but does not clearly state the comparison, and the conclusion’s wording makes your final judgement difficult to follow. Several points are asserted rather than explained—for example, why airline costs cannot be used in other ways, or how reduced travel would affect a country’s economy. Develop these links and make the comparison explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the environmental benefit and economic disadvantages, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of your argument. You also use signposting such as “For example,” “For instance,” and “In conclusion.” However, some links are mechanical or unclear, and the progression within paragraphs is uneven. The sentence beginning “For instance, if a airline industry…” contains several connected claims without clearly showing how they relate. The conclusion repeats the main points but does not clearly restate the comparison. Use clearer sentence boundaries and linking phrases that show cause and result, and ensure each paragraph develops one main idea in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “air traffic,” “toxic gases,” “carbon dioxide,” “local economy,” and “greenhouse,” so the reader can identify the subject and your main ideas. However, the range is limited and many word choices, forms, and spellings are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “pollutated,” “disadvanges,” “fully abandant,” and “big crises”; phrases such as “the country growth” and “make peoples” are also unnatural. These errors reduce precision and make some claims hard to understand. Build a bank of accurate collocations for environmental and economic effects, and check spelling and word forms before using less familiar vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if an airline industry get reduction…” and a relative clause in “a plane…which emit carbon dioxide.” This shows an effort to express causes and consequences. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction can make the reader work to understand your meaning. For example, “many people become agree” and “the environment become less…” do not use the correct verb forms, while “a plane…which emit” has a subject–verb agreement problem. Some punctuation also creates run-on sentences. Practise accurate basic clauses first, then build longer sentences with one clear main clause and carefully checked subordinate clauses.

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