Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, travelling has become the most importan part of our life. There are different reasons for travelling arround the world such as tourism, business, etc. No doubt, this is directly and indirectly connected to the pollution. The fuel consumption in travelling affects environment which is the leading cause of the pollution according to several reports of survey.

Considering things in mind, people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year for whatever the reasons are in their minds. It is making a little impact on airlines in negative way but a good news for our environment. There are certain things that can be done without travelling like doing a business deal over an internet call, which will help our nature to protect from fuel usage. It might be difficult for few individuals but for the ecosystem it is necessary.

If we consider broader picture, it is necessary for our upcomming generation to experience the world at it best condition. It will also help different species of flora and fauna for survival. As several evidence are provided by the reports of sevier damage to the earth because of pollution has been done.

Generally, It's our moral responsibility to make our planet safe for of future where evry single soul can live life without any issues.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a relevant position: reducing flights is presented as beneficial for the environment, despite some negative effects on airlines and possible difficulty for individuals. Examples such as replacing a business trip with an internet call and protecting future generations help address the question. However, the response does not fully develop the disadvantages for individuals and businesses, and the environmental benefits are asserted rather than explained in detail. The final paragraph also makes broad claims about wildlife without supporting them. The response is 205 words, so it is 45 words below the required minimum; 13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop both sides with specific consequences and examples, then make the comparison behind “outweigh” explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph about reducing flights, a paragraph on future environmental benefits, and a brief conclusion. Linking phrases such as “Considering things in mind” and “If we consider broader picture” signal movement between points, and the overall direction is understandable. However, progression is limited: the second paragraph combines the effect on airlines, online business calls, and individual difficulty without clearly explaining how these points connect. The third paragraph repeats the environmental case rather than extending the comparison. Some transitions are awkward or unclear, and the conclusion is too brief to draw the argument together. Use topic sentences and clearer links between each claim, its example, and your judgement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fuel consumption,” “ecosystem,” “flora and fauna,” and “survival,” which helps communicate the environmental focus. There is also an attempt to express abstract ideas, such as “moral responsibility” and the condition of the planet for future generations. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “a good news,” “protect from fuel usage,” and “experience the world at it best condition.” Spelling errors such as “importan,” “arround,” and “upcomming” are noticeable. These issues sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing emissions, travel alternatives, and economic effects, and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “which will help our nature…” and a conditional opening with “If we consider…”. The main ideas are generally recoverable, but control is inconsistent, and several sentence structures are incomplete or faulty. For example, “As several evidence are provided by the reports…” is a dependent clause without a complete main clause, while “It is making a little impact on airlines in negative way” has problems with article use and sentence construction. There are also errors in agreement and number, as in “evidence are,” and punctuation and spacing are inconsistent. Practise completing subordinate clauses and checking articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries; aim for accurate complex sentences rather than adding complexity at the expense of clarity.

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