Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

a few individuals believed that they should stop use of flight or they have to reduce the use of flight to travell long distance. This essay will examine the more environmental benifits by this approch and also explain some disdvantages related to oversease business which cause negative impact on our economy.

The main advantages is it reduce the noise pollution becuase the noise of flight direct harm to the life of bird and the people who are living near to the airport area. For instance noise of the flight and frequency of the flights are high because now a days people prefer to travel at short distance by flight to save the time due to which people living near the area they really get headache as well as it cause hearing loss problem due to the higher desiable of noise. Also the use of fuel is also much higher. Moreover the emission of Co2 gas by burning the fossile fuels which deplet the quality of air so, it directly cause the air pollution.

Reduce the use of flight may impact on business because many people do their business with other country like chaina, canadaand many more , therefore people needs to visit other countries for meetings and to directly visit the factory.

In conclusion, There are more advantages of reduction of use of flight or stop the use of flight completely which provides many benifits to the environment save the fuel reduce the noise pollution and improved the quality of air, where as some disadvantages on business that people can not do business with other countries which cause negative impact on our economy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a position that the environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages, and you identify relevant effects: noise and air pollution, fuel use, and difficulties for businesses that need international visits. This gives the response a clear connection to the question. However, the comparison is only partly developed. The environmental points are repeated in the conclusion rather than weighed against the business impact, and the business paragraph gives little explanation of how reduced flying would affect companies or whether alternatives are available. The opening also promises to examine the benefits and disadvantages but does not establish the comparison clearly. Develop each main idea with a specific explanation or example, then explain why the environmental gains matter more than the costs to individuals and businesses.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph on environmental effects, a paragraph on business disadvantages, and a conclusion. Basic linking expressions such as “For instance,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first body paragraph moves from noise to health effects and then fuel and emissions without clearly separating or connecting these points. Some links are mechanical, and the conclusion largely repeats earlier claims rather than drawing the comparison together. Referencing is also sometimes unclear, as in “due to which people living near the area.” Organise each paragraph around one central claim and use clearer links to show cause, consequence, and contrast.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “noise pollution,” “emission,” “fossile fuels,” and “economy,” so the reader can follow the main subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or awkward, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. Examples include “stop use of flight,” “the higher desiable of noise,” and “do their business with other country.” Spelling errors such as “benifits,” “becuase,” and “deplet” are also noticeable. Aim to learn accurate collocations for this topic and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions for the environmental effects and business consequences would help you explain your ideas without relying on repeated words such as “use,” “people,” and “flight.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “because the noise of flight…” and a sentence using “therefore.” However, the longer structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “The main advantages is it reduce” has problems with agreement and verb form, while “people needs to visit” and “it cause” also show incorrect subject–verb agreement. Articles and sentence boundaries are inconsistent, particularly in the opening and conclusion. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “which,” and “although.” Check each sentence for a clear subject, a correctly formed verb, and appropriate punctuation.

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