Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are some mixed experence plus advantages and disadvantages if people dicreases their fly time or flying with partner. It will beneficial for environmen along with financial advantages, how ever business may hampered.

In this era we are facing lots of environmental problems like air polution. Which is nowdays gone more dengerous then ever. If people minimizies their fly time it also cause lower air traffic which may have little positive impact on the environment which in my point of view is a great step towards air pollution. Traveling alone may reduce the cost of that individual if it is not mendatory to go with that partner. Because it is giving financial stability too.

On the other side, it has so many disadvantages too which are low profit margin in the traveling business. This step may caused airlines heavy loss as the are fully dependable on the individuals travel frequency. Also it may cause mental issue too, in your family as you are traveling alone whitout a person. It actually depends on the tour or travel perpose. As you can not enjoy solo traveling every time. Sometimes you need company too.

For example, When i travel cox's bazar alone by plane it cost me 10000 for singel person which may almost double if partner added. But benifical for business men who are sharing similer platform with this service line. I used to visit cox's bazar more frequently but now i vist there once a year. That help me to be get financially more independend.

In the conclusion we can say that reducing number of time they fly which may contribute to help environment is always a greater then individuals and business.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that reducing flights benefits the environment more than it harms individuals and businesses, and you mention relevant effects such as lower air pollution, airline losses, and personal costs. However, the response only partly answers the comparison in the question: the environmental benefit is asserted as “a great step” without explaining its likely scale, while the disadvantages are not weighed against it in much detail. The discussion of travelling alone and needing company also shifts away from reducing flight frequency. Your Cox’s Bazar example adds personal context, but its connection to environmental impact and business consequences is unclear. Develop the central comparison with specific reasoning—for example, how fewer flights reduce emissions and why this outweighs economic or convenience costs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate discussion of benefits and disadvantages, an example, and a conclusion. This gives the reader some organisation. However, progression is uneven: the first body paragraph moves from pollution to individual travel costs, and the second combines airline profits with family-related mental effects and enjoyment of solo travel. These points are not clearly linked to one another or to the main comparison. Connect each paragraph to one central idea and use clearer transitions to show how the points relate. The conclusion repeats the position but does not summarise the reasoning, and phrases such as “On the other side” and “For example” do not always create a precise logical link.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “environmental problems,” “air traffic,” “financial stability,” and “profit margin.” These choices show some awareness of the subject, but the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to interpret, such as “mixed experence,” “dicreases their fly time,” and “fully dependable on.” Some expressions are also imprecise: “mental issue” does not clearly explain the personal disadvantage, and “sharing similer platform” is hard to understand in context. Build a more accurate set of topic phrases and check spelling and word forms. Prefer precise expressions such as “reduce flight frequency,” “airline revenue,” and “emissions” where they fit your meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both short statements and attempts at longer structures, including conditional phrasing such as “if it is not mendatory to go with that partner.” However, the range is limited, and complex attempts often contain errors that interrupt the message. For example, “Which is nowdays gone more dengerous then ever” is a sentence fragment, while “This step may caused airlines heavy loss” has an incorrect verb form and missing grammatical elements. There are also problems with agreement and sentence construction in “if people minimizies their fly time it also cause lower air traffic.” Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense, agreement, articles, and punctuation. More accurate control of a few varied structures would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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