Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

I agree both statement if we talk about the if the people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or stop flying altogether yes this give the benfit for evirnment benefit or they aslo disavdantages for individual and business.

The first adventage is that the envirnement is free from populltion like when more planes flies every day or calculate how many planes flies everywhere and these fuel smoke damge the air where we used for breathing they affect our lungs and then health of people are not distrub even the animals also serving these situation.

Other disadventage is that today planes are very crashed and lives in the dangers and some family lost their someones and even not reconize the body after the crash so when the number of planes files every days. other disadvanges is that everyone can not afford the price of ticket

if we talk about there are disadvanges for individual and business there are mostly travelling by air when any emgerancy occur or any business meeting attend so they try to avirrve on the time without any delay becuase when they go by road they face many difficulies like they are not reach on time or travelling is not conivent and if we are not travelling lover then you can not quickly and another is that you cannot enjoy the travelling

In conclusion planes give more adventages as compared to disadvantges planes are benefit to arrive on the times every you can go or if we talk about te envirnment off couse the enviemnemt if affect the if planes moves more envirmnet affect and business get loss

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the central comparison and give a position: the environmental effects of flying are harmful, but you also see air travel as useful for individuals and businesses. The points about aircraft emissions, health, urgent travel and business meetings are relevant. However, the position is difficult to follow: the opening says you agree with the statement, while the conclusion says planes offer more advantages, without clearly deciding whether environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages. Several ideas are also unclear or insufficiently explained, such as plane crashes and ticket affordability, and there are no specific examples to support them. State your judgement directly and develop two or three relevant reasons with clear explanations and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an opening, several body paragraphs and a conclusion, so there is an attempt to organise the discussion. Some progression is visible as you move from environmental effects to disadvantages and then to travel for work. However, ideas are not consistently arranged into clear, focused paragraphs: the paragraph beginning “Other disadventage” combines crashes and ticket prices, while the next contains several different points in one long sequence. Linking phrases such as “if we talk about” are repeated and do not always show the relationship between ideas. Use one main point per paragraph, connect each explanation clearly to that point, and make the conclusion follow the position established in the introduction.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “environment,” “fuel smoke,” “emergency,” “business meeting” and “afford.” This gives the reader some access to your intended ideas. However, the range is basic and repeated, and frequent spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts difficult to understand, for example “populltion,” “disavdantages,” “planes are very crashed” and “travelling lover.” Some expressions also do not convey a clear meaning, such as “animals also serving these situation.” Build a more accurate set of topic phrases and check spelling carefully. Prefer precise expressions for emissions, health effects and the practical value of air travel rather than repeating general words such as “advantage” and “disadvantage.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make an effort to express connected ideas using clauses with “when,” “because” and “if,” as in the discussion of travelling by road and attending business meetings. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately joined, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and plurals frequently obscure the message. For example, “I agree both statement” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “when more planes flies every day” has incorrect agreement. The long sentence beginning “if we talk about there are disadvanges” is difficult to follow because clauses are not controlled or punctuated clearly. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one subordinate clause at a time; check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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